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Review:NPE says:
Hello, I am Elderflowers on the forums, but most people call me NPE or Nick.

This is genuinely fun.

I don't say that disparagingly, it's hard to give something a sort of light energy like this.

There is something really effective at how direct the prose is. It doesn't wallow in description or narrative musings, but takes you from A to B pretty quickly.

It is also how I would imagine a kid remembering it. The focus on Hagrid's size, the way it reads like "this happened - then this happened" almost.

There's an honesty to it.

I also enjoyed the assumptions he was crazy.

Definitely consider writing about Muggle-Borns and Hogwarts post the Second War, it is always a good subject area.

Even though I said I liked the prose style, my only recommendation would be making it more descriptive with more unique flourishes to the thought process of each character - if this story develops into longer chapters.

Best,

Nick ;)

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