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Review:navyfail says:
Hello, here to spread some holiday cheer!

I'm very intrigued by your characterizations of Daphne and Astoria. From the few stories I've read of them, most have actually characterized them as the opposite with Daphne being the hopeful, pretty, and innocent one and Astoria being the reserved, cold one so this is new for me. I like how close the two are and how Daphne doesn't hate Astoria for being softer.

I really do think they should have left for America. I understand why they want to stay but I'm with Daphne on this one and I actually think their parents weren't being reasonable. However, it seems like Daphne isn't fond of her parents, especially her dad for experimenting on Muggle science. Is she mad at them or just worried what that will cost them?

One thing I noticed from the very beginning are your descriptions. You don't overdo it but have just enough to give a visual image of what's happening. And you weave in your description very well with your action so kudos on that!!

I'm scared for Astoria. She has detention which can never be anything good. I really hope she toughens up at one point because or else she's going to suffer a lot through the year. I love that she's so full of life but I feel like that'll end up harming her.

Anyway, great start to the story! I think you have a great plot going on and I can already get a feel of your characters!

~Sama
P.S. Also another question, do most of the purebloods know or have a suspicion of the Greengrasses being blood traitors or is it just a well kept secret? Maybe that was already said somewhere in the story and I missed it, if it is sorry about that.

Author's Response: Hi Sama!

Thanks so much for the review! I'm glad you enjoyed this first chapter!

I never felt that Astoria could be cold like I have Daphne as. I molded her personality on the kind of person I could see Draco marrying and having a really happy life with and I just don't think he could be happy with someone cold. He needs warmth in his life, I think.

They definitely should have left when they had the chance. But I suppose people are very attached to home. I molded them a little off of refugee stories I'd heard. None of them want to leave their countries. They all think that it'll be okay for them. There's a strong connection to home after all. Starting over is daunting.

But Daphne does love her parents. She just comes across as harsh sometimes. She's a harsh person, I guess. But she is nothing if not practical, so she is angry at their sentimentality a bit.

I'm sorry I didn't make it clear, but I imagine that Linus Greengrass is an unspeakable, so his work is a secret to everyone else. But now that the Ministry is taken over by Voldemort, the Greengrasses are concerned that the Death Eaters will find out what his research entails.

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing and writing such kind things! I hope you read on and let me know what you think!

Stefanie


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