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Review:nott theodore says:
Val ♥ ♥ ♥ You, as always, are far too lovely - I didn't realise that there were two new chapters of this story up that I'd missed, and you dedicated this one to me ♥

I love this story so much, and it's so good to see it developing here. I really liked the way that the shorter scenes at the start of this chapter gave us an insight into the way that life at Hogwarts is trying to continue in spite of the war that's going on outside the school walls, which is slowly creeping in and affecting the lives of the students that live there.

It was great to see the little snippets of Cormac and Eloise on their own with their friends and to see how they're both beginning to notice each other independently more and more - how even their friends around them are starting to notice that, too. In a way, it's really lovely that something so ordinary - and yet new and brilliant - can happen in the midst of the war that's raging around them. It shows the way that life goes on and these students won't let it take away everything from them, even if their families and their lives are affected by it.

The feelings that they're getting for each other - more Cormac in this chapter, it seems - are so cute ♥ He seems to be falling for her quite badly already and I'm so intrigued to see more of this!

I loved the scene between Eloise and Cormac, too! I'm so glad that she apologised - I think she probably had a right to shout at him, in the circumstances, but there could have been reasons for Cormac missing the library session that she didn't know about - if there were, I'm intrigued to find out what was behind it. And they've rearranged the tutoring to happen tonight! Yay, I'm so excited to see more of the two of them together and see their acquaintance/friendship/relationship (whatever it is exactly that's going on between them right now :P) developing!

The ending of the chapter was so intriguing! I love seeing Eloise working in the hospital wing, because it really adds in another dimension to what happened at Hogwarts and the opportunities that were available to students there. It maybe even foreshadows what her role in the battle might be?

The Slytherins - Malfoy and Blaise - were really well written. I wasn't expecting the two of them to be the boys who walked in at the end, but at the same time I thought you wrote them really well. There wasn't the same sense of familiarity that we get when we read about Malfoy from Harry's perspective and that worked because Eloise isn't the sort of person who's encountered him as much, I imagine. Their hostility towards her at the beginning of the interaction made a lot of sense; I liked the way that it showed Slytherins aren't completely uncaring (because I hate that trope) and that they're protective of their own. As sad as the last scene was, I thought it was so effective - you did a great job showing how far-reaching this war is, and the way that it's affecting everyone, no matter what house they're in or what age they are. Aloysius is just a little boy, really, and I'm so impressed with the way you added a whole new dimension to the Parkinson family and I felt so sorry for him.

As always, this was another wonderful chapter, Val! Reading onto chapter seven now!

Sian :)

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