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Review:Gabriella Hunter says:
Hello!

This is Gabbie from the forums here with your review for our swap! Thanks for the one you left for Ruins, it was really sweet! :3

It's been a while since I last stopped by this story and I can't believe that I forgot how amazing it is! I will have to keep on reading it because it's really great. You don't really read a lot of stories that focus on the gritty evil that was happening in Hogwarts while Harry and the others were gone. I like here that you're not shying away from it and I have to say, I write angst all the time and wrote the Battle of Hogwarts (I made several people cry) but this made ME pause. So, congrats! Violence like this is so hard to write, especially when it's against students and it took me a moment to catch my breath and continue reading.

I was upset for everyone involved in this and the grim feeling that's cast about this entire scene is written so well. Astoria's fear and Luna's determination were wonderfully written. Luna is a brave girl and I just love how strong she is, her character came across very well but it hurt to see her being tossed aside like that. She's been hurt a lot and I am worried about how she'll be able to recover after this chapter.

Speaking of recovering...Daphne's observations through this entire chapter. God, I feel so sorry for her! I also want to punch Pansy and Blaise in the face because their obvious enjoyment of this is just revolting. Daphne is in a difficult position of course because she doesn't want to let on that she doesn't agree with the Carrows but at the same time, she doesn't want to put herself or Astoria in danger so seeing her sister there was just too much for either of them.

I honestly can't believe that anyone would expect her to sit idly by while her sister is being tortured and I had absolutely no sympathy for Crabbe. Daphne is what was worrying me the most though about this because I'm sure that that level of anger can get her into some trouble later. It was scary to see her reaching into that level of magic and she was willing to actually kill. Scary, scary. That entire scene was SO intense and I was just holding my breath, the action in it was great and the fact that Daphne scared the Carrows just proves how drastic her attack was.

But now she's trapped with Astoria and being tortured! How are they going to get through this? I am so worried about them both but I am just blown away by how well written this was. THe pacing, your characters, the tone, everything was perfect and I am now a HUGE fan!

Much love,

Gabbie

Author's Response: Hi Gabbie! Thanks so much for the review. I'm so happy you like this story because I've hit a wall writing the ending. I know what happens next, I just can't write it. So reviews, even on the early chapters are really helpful!

I was so worried about how the violence in this chapter, and in the story moving forward came across. It's getting increasingly difficult for me to write these kinds of scenes, but I do hope they're getting better as I write.

I love Luna so much. She's one of my favourite characters in the whole series. But she is such a challenge to write. I'm not entirely satisfied with how I write her character yet and its become a huge block for me with the ending chapters. But I'm really happy you liked her portryal here.

No sympathy for Crabbe from me either. I didn't feel anything when he died in the last book. He's a terrible person. But then Daphne snapped! If you read in you'll see that it happens more and more often. Her mental state is in a precarious position.

Eep, I'm so so glad you enjoyed this chapter! I hope you like the rest as well and hopefully I'll get back into the habit of writing this! I wanted to be done by Christmas but that's definitely not happening, haha.

Thanks for the review!!

Stefanie


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