|Review:||Davey Stu says:|
At last! I started reading your story about 3 weeks ago and this is me finally caught up with it. Of course my reward will be having to wait now for each chapter, but such is life...
Firstly I'd like to say I think you've done a really lovely job with this story. :) The characters feel very much like those from the books, you've stayed very true to them, and I've enjoyed a lot of your story lines. I know you don't particularly enjoy writing action scenes but I don't think you're bad at them, and if it's an area you feel you could improve in that's all the more reason to continue writing them! :)
I'm pleased for Hermione, finally getting to see her relationship moving forward. I think it makes sense for her and Ron to be a little behind Harry and Ginny, but if they were a little more open with their feelings, if she were to actually speak to him when she worries that they aren't moving forward, I do feel like it maybe wouldn't take them so long. But then, it took them 6 years at Hogwarts and a year in the wilderness before they actually admitted having feelings for each other, so I guess it's not surprising!
As for Harry, I think there was compromise to be found there with Teddy. He could simply have told him his parents died helping to fight against evil, that they were heroes, and in time Teddy would have come to understand what that meant, without fears of death eaters wanting to kill him, and still feeling close to them. But then it's natural after all Harry went through, after all the horrors he was forced to face at such a young age, for him not to feel protective like that. It would probably seem silly to him to sugarcoat things, but he has to remember they live in a more peaceful time now.
As a Scotsman it was quite surreal to be reading characters discussing Scottish football! The Scots language wasn't perfect, but it wasn't terrible. I doubt though that even the most biased Albion Rovers fan would claim Cliftonhill is the best stadium in the country, but I suppose we could put it down to the drink! ;)
Finally, I'm eager to find out who our killer is... I hope we don't have too long before we get some more revelations!
Author's Response: Can't believe you read the whole thing that fast!!! Sorry to make you wait for chapters - I'm always trying to be more frequent in updating!
I am so, so happy you've enjoyed the story so far! Thank you so much for all your kind words, they are greatly appreciated. Thank you especially for what you had to say about the action scenes. You're right- I just need to keep doing it to get better :)
You're also so right about Ron and Hermione! If only they weren't so scared of being honest with each other. I think they will get there eventually but I also think it's their personalities, especially Ron's. They'll get through it though!
Yes, Harry could have been a little more smooth with Teddy. But I agree with you that no one really sugarcoated things when he grew up, so he's not really used to it. Ginny will teach him all about it - her childhood was so very different from his.
That's so cool that you're Scottish! I feel a bit embarrassed about their language, I honestly just googled how to write Scotttish because I had no clue, so "not terrible" is more than I would have expected ;) I'll take any pointers you can give me though! My grandpa thinks our local football team is better than Barcelona so Audrey's uncle was loosely based on him. Maybe I should tone it down a bit though, haha.
Hope you've read the reveal of the murderer by now and that it didn't disappoint. Thank you so, so much for this lovely review. There's nothing I appreciate more than getting some insight to readers' thoughts after each chapter, so thank you for taking the time to share yours. And of course for all your incredibly kind words! It means so much to me that you're enjoying this story! Xx