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Review:manno_malfoy says:
Hello! I'm here for our review swap. I do love Ted and Andromeda a lot, so I was really excited for this.

I felt that this story was a lot more Andromeda than Andromeda/Ted as we just get to know Andromeda better. We get introduced to her ideologies and where she stands on matters, and her relationship with her sisters and even other Slytherins.

I think your characterisation of the three sisters is quite admirable. Your Bellatrix really is interesting, and I would love to see a story like this one focused on her. What I liked about what you've done with Bella is how you managed to balance her age and the madness, in a way that made it believable. She loves her sisters and it shows. She's fairly agreeable when surrounded by suitable company. So really great work with that.

I like that Narcissa and Lucius are in a loving relationship and it isn't just arranged. Even though we didn't get to see that much of her, but I suppose just enough to know where she stands on things.

What confused me a little bit is the age of everyone and what years they're in. It was hard to imagine what sort of relationship Lucius and Narcissa were having because I didn't know how old they were. And I understand that it's AU (and I'm guessing you did that so you can place all three sisters at Hogwarts at the same time, but do correct me if I'm wrong). But even if that's the case, I feel that it would've been a lot easier to understand the characters if I knew what year they're in.

My favourite part perhaps is when Regulus joined them in the compartment and Bellatrix referred to him as their only cousin. It's such a small thing but makes a bold statement about Bellatrix and what she's like.

I found your Ted very interesting. I like that he has an accent and that you showed it throughout the chapter rather just told us and left it up to imagination. He's just so spontaneous with what he says, and he's the absolute opposite of her, and on top of all of that, he called her 'man'. I had to bury my face in my hands at that moment and wanted to dive into the story and drag him away before he did anything else that's stupid. But alas.


And last but not least, your Andromeda. I admire that even though she disagrees with her family on many things, she manages to not show it as much. She still maintains a natural relationship with her sisters. But I like that she treats Rabastan with some contempt because it shows how her tolerance is just extended to her family.

I happened to catch onto a few typos so I thought I'd point them out. Just in case.

-Andromeda protested in a joking manor... (should be 'manner')

-Oi Ted, common mate! (come on)

-The included you Mr Black (that includes)

Other than that, I thought that this was a nice story. I did want to see more of Ted and Andromeda and how they progress. I do hope that'll be in the series that you've mentioned. Well done with everything, though! :D

-Manno

Author's Response: Hello!
Thank you so much for your review! :)
Yeah this definitely leans morello Andromeda, but I am planning to continue this with a series of one shots, so keep your eyes peeled! There will definitely be more Ted to come, because we love him! :D
I have actually written a Bellatrix one shot which I hope to publish soon as well :) and thank you, I try quite hard with her characters. I really believe that her madness was quite hidden in her younger years and it was Azkaban which made it really come out. She was a black so I think she would have held herself well and not show any madness to start with :)
ahh I'm sorry the ages confused you, I actually linked this to run alongside my novel which is a WIP and explains all of there ages :) But I'll definitely true to make some adjustments to make it obvious in this one as well!
Ah i'm glad you liked that, it was my favourite part as well!
Hahaha! Ted is my favourite! He is totally the opposite, which is what I think attracts Andromeda to him so much. And he definitely does not know how to act around her! :')
Andromeda is a very torn character, which I'm looking forward to explore more, but she definitely doesn't believe in pure blood superiority. Yes I think she would hate the outside pure blood world to her family because she hates the ideals to much, but she loves her family and would do anything for them.
Thank you for pointing out the typos! I'll definitely sort those out ASAP!

Thank you so much for such a lovely review, I will definitely have more Ted and Andromeda so keep an eye out! :D

Katie :)


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