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Review:aurevoir says:

You'd never listened to Taylor Swift?! But she's everywhere! [I'm also a closeted Swiftie. Not so closeted. I've actually been singing her all day].

So I picked this story because it had few reviews and because I love Taylor.

I really like this story - it's one of the things that I think nobody ever thinks about. Which we have had this conversation before about them not thinking of things. But I never have really focused so much on the tabloids hounding them as much.

I think you did a really good job with Luna as well - I like that she's sort of ended up losing her sparkle. Something that is unique about her. It makes sense though - and I like that. I also like that you address the Neville/Luna thing. I think I might be a little bit of a closeted Neville/Luna fan, but I like that you kept this canon and addressed those at the same time.

On the constructive end - there were a few times the tense changed between present and past. I don't write in first person because I always have problems with that, so it would just be something to consider. Just one example:

I quickly tried to sign the napkin that she held out for me, but by the time Id finished a crowd had surrounded me. This was really the first time that Id been in a crowd since the paparazzi had broken into my home and I began to panic. [the second sentence comes off more present].

But really - the tense change was something I just barely noticed. I liked this story - I really hope you get more reads on it. It flows really well and it addresses important matters. I hope you keep writing these type of stories ♥ ♥ ♥


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