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Review:oldershouldknowbetter says:
Hi there, here for a bit of the new BvB action.

Ah Alicia Spinnet hey, it's interesting to me to see how people have used the inhabitants of Hogwarts post Hogwarts. We know what happened to some of them but the rest ... well that's open to a lot of leeway. I've turned her into a journalist in my story, but apparently here you've used her as an obliviator.

It would seem to me to be a very thankless task being an obliviator, but there are perks are there? Well, enough with all this fafing about, I should actually get on and read more than just the first two words.

Ah work, all the exciting things they tell us about it and usually we are stuck with the mundane. I like how you have Alicia wanting to make a difference - the war would have changed the outlook of a lot of those involved.

Advanced apparition is an interesting decision to make, and all it takes is more determination and greater focus. You present that scene well and it is well carried on from the one involving Twycross from the books. It has the same feel to it and that's well done. It is necessary for your conceit to work - that of British Obliviators being required in other European countries.

We see an example of it when the focus returns to the present and Alicia has to go to Slovenia. I can see one perk of being an obliviator right there.

When she gets there she has to deal with a ferocious ... crup? Umm, yes they are dogs and some dogs can be huge and menacing, but you do know that crups resemble Jack Russel terriers? So at most they would be about two feet long. Anyway, it made me smile a bit - you couldn't have used something more dangerous?

Anyway, from what we see of Alicia she is fast and competent and makes the right decisions. The way governments are, having her turn up suddenly at the Slovenian Ministry trying to explain herself when she doesn't speak the language would not work. Alicia realises the logic of this and opts for the much more sensible course of going through the proper channels.

Yes those are perks right there, being allowed to officially jaunt from one country to another would be a fantastic perk of any job. I'm glad Alicia took the time to revel in the beauty and tranquillity of the spot.

An enjoyable little story of the unexpected perks that might come from a usually mundane job.


Author's Response: Hey Andrew!

Thank you so much for dropping by! Yes, the fact that characters post-Hogwarts offer so much leeway is one of the things that makes me love writing about such characters. Ooh, if I get some more free time soon, I would love to take a look at your portrayal of Alicia in your fic.

It was lovely hearing all the things you liked about the story here. I thought it would make sense having advanced apparition, and since I couldn't think of how it could change, I just thought I'd make it the same but require more effort from those wanting to apparate.

Haha, I actually didn't know that about crups! I figure, even if they do resemble Jack Russell Terriers, apparently they are ferocious to muggles, and will eat almost anything - I know I would definitely be terrified of a dog attacking me, even if it is a small dog. I can definitely think about using something more dangerous, but in my mind (I do have a slight fear of dogs), a crup, despite its size, would be terrifying enough.

Thanks for all your feedback and comments! I'm glad you enjoyed it. The whole premise of the story was exposing a different side to an obliviating job, and it seems like that hopefully was conveyed to you. Once again, thank you very much for reading and reviewing this Andrew!

- Charlotte

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