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Review:Owlpost68 says:
This was very unexpected but very good too. I thought it was funny that Ron mentioned how crazy Hermione was when she suggested to break out of Gringotts on the back of a Dragon lol.

Here are my notes:
"she would have just asked as to come, right?"- us to come

“Accio cloak of invisibility!”- I don't really think this is possible, the magic is too strong and prevents people from knowing where you are in any way so I don't think it's able to be summoned.

"catching her wad with is left hand."- wand

I was confused that the Death Eater was the same man who was going to use the computer to "find her parents" Maybe make that a little clearer.

All in all though, I loved the concept, it would make sense death eaters would have people on the inside of anything to do with transportation. Once they knew where Hermione was going they could have easily have known they were dentists from before the memory wipe and hide at ones in the area she went to.

Good job with Ron and Hermione finally getting together too :) so cute

Author's Response: Aw, I'm so glad to hear you liked it. And yes, haha, that was quite a crazy moment for Hermione :)

Thank you for pointing out this mistakes! I really appreciate it as sometimes you read through something enough times that you don't see the typos anymore!

I'm very glad you liked the idea of this chapter and that you found it believable they would try to keep track of Hermione.

I'm so glad you liked the Ron/Hermione bit too! Thank you again for reading and reviewing xx

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