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Review:SiriusAura92 says:
Hey!
Sorry for being so quiet for so long!

I really like the drama that's finally unfurling between the sisters and I'm actually hoping that this isn't the last time they see each other.

The Battle of Hogwarts! (YAY!) Firstly I want you to know that I do like the way you've approached your climax and the argument of whether they should get involved fits in very nicely. However, traditionally I would recommend more build for a action/battle-climax, especially one the size and scale of The Battle for Hogwarts.
The reason it works here is because we all know about the battle, we all know it's coming and are (on some level) waiting for it.
Perhaps a cheeky POV of a character who's readying for the battle/knows about about its advancement in a previous chapt to wet your audience's apatite for what's coming.
Just a general note for you as a writer really.

On the whole, a very well written chapter and I cannot wait to see what comes!

P.S I also like the new name ;)

SiriusAura92
:)

Author's Response: Hi there!

It's definitely me who should be apologizing for having not posted anything new in so long. I'm still working on the next chapter, but I swear I'm getting there (just at a truly glacial pace).

I also think there's more to add to this in some parts as you've said. It's annoying that I've sort of posted this as I wrote it instead of writing the whole thing and then posting, but I suppose this way, I get feedback from wonderful people like you and can improve my writing as I go! I've actually spent some time over the last few weeks going back and editing the past chapters, not sure if you noticed. Nothing major changed, just word choice, flow, and the like, but I may change bigger things before I finish this.

Thanks again for your feedback and hopefully I've have a new chapter up soon!

Much love,

Stefanie


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