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Review:AlexFan says:
I thought the writing flowed very well, I liked the attention to detail that you paid, throwing in descriptions throughout the story to pull the reader in, and it wasnít abrupt either, it flowed well with the dialogue and the emotions of the characters. I really liked the flashbacks that you threw in there, it really helps let the reader know just how big of an impact Fred had on George and Angelinaís lives before he died. It also shows just how much Angelina really cared about him and how much effort it was going to take her to move on from the grieving stage.

I can see how the current setup with George and Angelina could lead to them falling in love with each other. I think their pain is going to be one of the things that bring the two of them together. I liked how Angelina asked George how he could be happy when his brother had just died, and for some reason Georgeís answer just made me really sad. I donít know, but to me it just seems like the only way that he can deal with his brother, his best friend, being gone is by trying to push the sadness away and focus on the positive otherwise heís not going to be able to move on with his life because heís going to be mourning Fred the whole time. Itís almost like if George acts like nothing is wrong then it will stop feeling like something is wrong. It honestly seems like something George would do, try to make a situation a lot happier than it is to make it easier to deal with so well done on his characterization.

I think youíve got a really interesting start to your story here.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review! And for your amazing speed!

This is the first thing I've written that is really, desperately sad. It's also the hardest thing for me to write just because grief is so difficult to put into words. And George is quite a difficult person to characterize properly I think. Fred and George have such similar personalities in the books, but they should be differentiated I think. So that's what I try to do, but it's hard since their identities are so tied to each other.

Anyway, this whole story is kind of a big writing exercise for me in emotion and feeling (two things I struggle with in my personal life), so I'm really glad you thought it was well done!

Hope to see you here again!


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