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Review:Shadowkat says:
Here, slightly late, for our swap!

Interesting chapter. I like how you included the farming season as the time to let the students off, as well as the thought they were putting into classes. However, there were a few things that bugged me.

First, I agree with a lot of what Hogwarts27 said. The dialog seemed a bit choppy, and some of the events seemed not to fit with the time period. As you probably noticed, my story doesn't always use old English dialog, and some things, like a bookstore, wouldn't have fit. The latter was more of a slip (creative liberty card. It's in published novels, I have an excuse! XD). But the former is more for the sake of flow. It's easier to read and sometimes old language puts people off. I also, like their review said, didn't understand the reaction with the snake when magic in general was seen as the work of the devil. Especially with how much she seemed to care for him before.

However, overall I liked it. JustJustbe careful with a few things. :)

Author's Response: Hey :) Thanks, I'm glad you found it interesting and that you liked the agricultural basis for the school seasons - it seemed pretty natural for the time period.

The dialogue used to be a lot more modern and I got a lot of comments about it being too modern, and I eventually changed much of it to be slightly more archaic. Maybe you would have liked it beforehand, but to me the modernness didn't really fit in this story. I'm sorry you thought it was too choppy. But either way, medieval Anglo-Saxon English was nothing like the language we speak today and so pretty much any style of writing can be believable, haha! :P Which events didn't fit the time period? I didn't think I wrote a bookstore in there... As for the snake, serpents were seen as evil and sinful in those times (as Christianity first began to gain a foothold in Britain) and so Salazar's connection to them really scared Maeve. Magic on it's own wasn't much of a deal in those days, not until a couple of centuries later at any rate.

Thanks for your review!

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