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Review:Oregonian says:
Hi there.

It’s almost always a pleasure to read a story about Severus Snape, and this is a very well-written story, revealing a little Missing Moment that could well have occurred in canon.

It’s a story with no dialogue, no very vigorous action, mainly a stream of consciousness touching upon a half dozen different but related topics as Snape leaves Lily’s funeral and walks along the river near his childhood home. But you make it work well, one thought flowing seamlessly into the next, with a background of scene description in the outdoor settings.

I appreciate your accomplished way with scene description, one detail being further adorned with subsidiary details, and then finished off with a sprinkle of tiny details dangling like little ornaments, all revealing your noteworthy ability to notice and record the myriad observable features that make up a common object such as a willow tree. Some authors take this type of description to an extreme, so that it becomes a tour de force, and the story line is almost lost in the thick verbiage of the descriptive details, but you do not go to this extreme, and I very much appreciate it. You are like a woman who knows it makes a better show not to wear all her jewelry at the same time.

I enjoyed reading about the not-common topics of Lily’s funeral (preservation charm: a good idea to keep the mortal remains fresh for two weeks) and the question of whether Snape or other members of the magical community believed in God or Heaven or Hell.

A tiny suggestion. In your final paragraph of three sentences, you use the conditional verb form (he would only return; he too would be gone) in the first two sentences, but the ordinary past tense for the final sentence (Severus Snape closed his own eyes..) So the first two sentence obviously refer to the future. But the final sentence almost sounds as if it refers to the time contemporaneous with the body of the story, so I would suggest putting that verb in the conditional form also (Severus Snape would close his own eyes for the final time).

Your writing is very imaginative, seeing possibilities in events that other might simply overlook, giving them dignity and gravitas, inviting us to look more closely at things we thought we already knew.

Thank you so much for bringing this one-shot to my attention. If we can call anything about Snape “sweet”, it was a sweet read.


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