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Review:Veritaserum27 says:
Hi there!

I'm here for the BvB!

I'd already read the first chapter of this and I saw that this one had no reviews, so I thought I'd drop by. This is a really cute tale of the train ride and the sorting hat. You did a fantastic job depicting a nervous first year with all of the apprehensions and uncertainties that go along with it. I have to admit that I think I've only read one chapter of The Shadows Within, so I'm not up with that story. Still, I don't think that detracted from this. I really like the idea that you're giving us the back story for each character individually while tying all of that in with the story of their first days at Hogwarts. It also didn't miss my attention that Lily hasn't been mentioned yet, and that intrigued me.

Was the blond boy on the train Remus? I think so - you gave us just enough detail to figure that out, without saying it (I LOVE that). I also love that you've placed Claire in Gryffindor without her having the "typical" traits. Sometimes I think as authors we feel like each character has to be the "quintessential" Gryffindor (or Ravenclaw, or Hufflepuff, or Slyther). Instead, characters are much more interesting when they possess a trait that is not as obvious. There are many different ways to be brave - and that immediately gives your story more depth.

I'm interested to know what will come next for this group of kids! Keep up the good work!

♥ Beth

Author's Response: Hi Beth, thanks for stopping by!

Lily's chapter is the next one. I felt like the first couple of chapters were needed to establish the other characters and show how they teamed up in their early days. Lily's chapter is next and it takes a bit of a twist on the others, pulling in something referenced in the main story in passing.

I purposefully left other characters a bit ambiguous. I'm glad you liked the reasoning for Claire, since I wanted to avoid making the group too cliche.

Thanks for the lovely review. =)


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