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Review:TreacleTart says:
Hi Stefi!

I'm here for our review swap!

This story immediately drew my attention because it's about Daphne and Astoria, but it doesn't focus on a romance with Draco. Hallelujah! Every time I read anything about Astoria, it's always in relation to how she falls for Draco. Sometimes the stories are good, but a lot of the time I wonder why she is so inextricably bound to him and why she can't have her own stories. Anyways, I was very excited to see your author's note clearly stating that he romance with Draco will not come into play in this!

I really liked your characterization of both Daphne and Astoria. I liked that they were both separate individuals with their own unique personalities. I think it's very fitting for Daphne as the older sibling to want to protect her younger sister from all of the horrors of the war, but as Astoria aptly points out, we know that isn't possible. It will be interesting to see how these two girls evolve throughout the story. I wonder if Astoria will learn to control her emotions because it seems pretty imperative to her survival.

I think that as far as first chapters go this really does exactly what it's supposed to do. I feel really drawn into this world that you're building and I already feel invested in the characters you've created. The flow was steady, not too fast, not too slow. Just right. If this is any hint as to what's to come, I will definitely be back for more.

Adding this one to my currently reading list! Good job! Thanks for an enjoyable swap!


Author's Response: Hi Kaitlin! Thanks for stopping by!

I admit, this began when I was mapping out the romance between Draco and Astoria, but then Astoria's back story just became infinitely more interesting than any sappy romance I could write. So the Greengrass family took on a life of their own. Draco does make an appearance in this story eventually, but not in the context of romance. I don't really like the trope that he had always noticed her in school or something like that because she's two years younger. He's probably only ever seen her in passing.

As for the characterization of the sisters, I wanted them to be quite different people, but still similar at their core (they are both Slytherin after all). For Astoria, I wanted to write about a character who faces war and is brave and strong in the face of all those terrors, but isn't cold or unemotional. It's a stereotype that I feel quite strongly about smashing.

Anyway, I'm really glad you enjoyed this chapter! Hope to see you back here :)


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