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Review:TreacleTart says:
Hey Lizzie!

I'm here for the Gryffindor Review Battle round 2! Go Team Red!

Why do you have to do this to me? Here it's a nice quiet Sunday morning and you've gone and broken my heart. Here I want to imagine a happy Harry who quit the Auror service to play Quidditch, but instead you've caused me to crash back to reality and the scars of war.

This was really a moving piece. The part where Harry was listing off all of the dead was so sad. I liked how you gave each person some specific thought from Harry's viewpoint. And can I just say how much I love that you've included Hedwig in the list. He often gets overlooked in the casualties, but he shouldn't. He was the first thing that I think Harry ever loved and his death shouldn't be minimized because he's an animal.

I know that you said you don't have much of a knack for angst, but I thought that you handled it quite well in this. Sometimes when people write about mourning and heartbreak it can come across very over wrought, but this did not. It was very authentic in its somberness. There wasn't a bunch of drama. There were no scenes of people screaming at each other. It was just a quite moment of reflection, but that's why it works so well. Harry isn't a dramatic person, so your approach makes perfect sense.

I think you did a fantastic job with this Lizzie and I can't wait to see you branch out into all sorts of different types of writing. Your first crack at angst proves that you are more than capable of handling it.

Good job!

~Kaitlin

Author's Response: Kaitlin,

Mwhahahahaha! Yup, that's what I do. Ruin nice quiet Sundays. :D

In all seriousness though, I'm REALLY glad you like this. This particular story is one I was really nervous about, and so far the response I've gotten has been pretty great! This leads me to conclude that I must have gotten something right!

I totally agree about Hedwig! She totally gets overlooked sometimes, and since I've got such a soft spot for her, I just HAD to put her in here...It just wouldn't have sat right with me if I hadn't.

Thanks so much for ALL of your Reviews Kaitlin. You've seriously almost read EVERYTHING I've got. That's both impressive and extremely flattering! I'm so glad you're willing to take the time to read that much of my work!!

LL


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