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Review:TreacleTart says:
Hey there!

I'm here for our review swap!

I picked this story because the concept sounded interesting. Missing moments for a whole group of OC's. I was truthfully a bit nervous that I wouldn't understand what was going on since I hadn't read the other story, but this was easy to follow.

I thought you did a nice job of illustrating what it would be like for a muggle child to find out about the Wizarding World. I would imagine there would be so much to see and do that she wouldn't know where to start! I guess Gringotts would be the logical place since as you pointed out, you need money before you can shop!

I thought the description of her wand selection stayed very in tune to what we know of them from the series. The little bits about her assuming that her wand hand would be the same as her writing hand really helped create that image of uncertainty that I think most muggleborns would feel.

I did notice one small typo, but it's quite nitpicky really. "explain it, but the somehow" The word "the" just needs to be removed.

All in all, a nice view into the life of a muggle who has just found out she's a witch!

~Kaitlin

Author's Response: Hi Kaitlin, thanks for the swap!

I'm glad you liked the Muggleborn exploring Diagon Alley for the first time idea. I was a bit worried of making it sound too much like Harry's, but I tried to bring in what I felt the first time I "saw" the magical world.

Thanks for pointing out the typo, I have since sent off an edited chapter so it will hopefully be fixed in the next couple of days.

Thanks again for the swap! =)


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