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Review:Infinityx says:
Hello, here for our swap!

That was heart-wrenching and beautiful. There was such raw emotion in this and I love how you've brought it out through your descriptions. I really like the way you've characterized Snape in this, and his emotions immediately after Lily's death. He's a difficult, complex character to write and you've done a really good job here.

I like how there's that critical air of his even when he's grieving. He scorns the funeral and himself for his mistakes, he realizes that past grudges didn't really matter, and the impact when he realized that Lily's gone for good was just so powerful.

You've integrated those little parts of his life in the coming years brilliantly. The fic flowed really well and you've managed to convey a whole myriad of strong emotions here. The only suggestion I have is to maybe linger on each of the sections and describe the feelings a bit more. Instead of telling readers that he felt in these particular ways, make them feel it as well.

Overall, this was a really beautiful one-shot and i'm so glad i read it. :)

Author's Response: Thank you, and thank you again for the tips! :D

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