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Review:marissa lily potter says:
Hey there!

I really loved this fic. I thought it was just the right amount of cute, quirky and serious. It was really nice being able read about James and Lily from such a different perspective. Everyone always has their own way of depicting how the two actually got together and while the story doesn't exactly confirm that this is how they started going out, it does give us a little bit of James and Lily action which I love. You let things develop well but also left it open to interpretation which I think was fantastic.

Can I just say that I am in love with your Lily? Seriously, I am. I love how feisty and strong she is. The story summary fits perfectly with your characterization of Lily. I think you played with a different side of Lily and you did a fantastic job of it! We don't often see Lily as cold but even while she was cold, I saw softness in her. I always thought of Lily as a very strong character with many different leading characteristics and you've made her just that in this fic.

The different scenes were nice. It gave us a bit of backstory without it being too much. The shifting scenes also helped keep my interest. Sometimes, they can be confusing more than helpful but you did a wonderful job at using them consistently well. It worked with your story summary as well! You said that Lily had a clockwork inside of her and I could see that so perfectly! She was complicated but her character was also quite well developed and consistent. I didn't feel like she went out of character at any point during this story!

James and Lily are seriously one of my favourite pairs to read and this story didn't disappoint in that area at all. Your writing style is great and the story kept my interest. I found myself wanting to read more at the end, which I think is always a good sign haha. I enjoyed reading the story and look forward to seeing more of your work around the site!

Cheers.

~Marissa

Author's Response: Aah, I'm so sorry about not responding! To be honest, part of the reason for the wait was because I was trying to find the words to respond. *__*

I'm really glad that you love my Lily! I know she's quite OOC to most people, but I'm really grateful to hear that you like her!

I'm also so glad that you liked the different scenes! I wasn't sure if they were too confusing or not, but I'm glad to know that you didn't think so, and that you could relate it to the summary :)

Thank you so much for the awesome review! :D


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