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Review:marissa lily potter says:

That was so adorable and cute! I LOVE LOVE LOVE Lily and James and I think their story is so tragic but I always picture how they got together in my head and the scenarios are always adorable and quirky and cute. You've definitely helped my head canon feel incredibly happy haha.

I love your characterization of Lily. I thought it was so perfect the way you could se her struggling about breaking up with Edric and really thinking about whether their relationships was good or not. I can also see her struggling not to like James but not being able to. She was fantastic and I appreciate that so much! You definitely stuck true to her. She's kind and intelligent but also not someone who could be with someone who doesn't stimulate her mentally. I always thought that's why Lily and James were so great for one another!

I also really like that you gave Lily a friend who was not a Gryffindor. There are so many stories about characters who are only friends with other people from their own house. But Hogwarts is so large and I can't picture not having friends outside of your own house! Lily also seems like the type of person who would be welcoming to a lot of people. The fact that she was friends with Snape for so long is definitely indicative of the type of good person that she is so it was nice to see her good friend come from another house.

So, Sirius is actually my favourite character in the entire Harry Potter series. I'm always nervous about reading any portrayal of Sirius because I adore him so much but you did a fantastic job sticking to his character! He and James are close and you can really see that here. He's also funny and charming and I loved that he's James wingman. I can definitely see that happening haha. The conversation between him and Lily is just how I picture it to be. Friendly but not overly so. You can tell that he cares about James and wants Lily to see the good in him.

I thought the awkwardness between Lily and Snape was great. I honestly wanted to cover my face at how awkward it was. xD But good on Lily for not letting Snape's awful words affect her too much (or at least show it)! You did a fantastic job with characterization and flow. I really enjoyed reading this story! Great work!



Author's Response: Hi Marissa!

I'm glad you liked the characterization! Sirius as we know him as an adult would obviously be vastly different than teenage Sirius, back before the betrayals and Azkaban and the fighting so I'm glad you thought I did him justice. As for Harry's parents, we know so much and so little about them at the same time so I'm glad you like how I portrayed them.

I agree with you about inter-house friendships! Your statement about why you think Lily realistically would be friends with people from other houses is very similar to my opinion. (Great minds think alike I guess!) Being friends with students from different houses especially would make sense given the need to fight against a common foe.

Thank you so much for the lovely review! It made me smile. =)

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