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Review:marissa lily potter says:
Hello!

This was quite an interesting chapter to read! It was different and well, very interesting. I was quite pleased with the new perspective we got to see magic from. I was a little skeptical about a Muggle who could do magic but then again, I could see that the wand helped channel the magic. I'm curious to see how you explain that some more and I really do hope that you do explain it. ^.^

I loved seeing Bellatrix! She was just as crazy and psychotic as ever and you really did her justice. Bellatrix has always been one of my favourite characters to read about just because she's so complicated. I could see all those different sides of her when you wrote about her. The whole part about her speaking about herself in third person was very believable. It definitely added to her overall craziness of her character. The fact that she thought of using the Muggle as her pet was just perfect. I could definitely see her doing something like that.

The flow of this chapter was great! It all seemed to fit together and everything moved along smoothly. I really think that you did a good job with the flow because I didn't find any choppiness. Having Serahn watch from the sidelines as some of the characters interacted with one another definitely helped with the flow because any time information was missed, it was attributed to the fact that of course the Muggle couldn't understand or catch everything!

Speaking of the Muggle, Serahn, I felt that his character could use a little more work. He came across as flat and bland in this chapter. Maybe that was the intent because he was just overwhelmed by seeing magic for the first time and being Imperiused by Bellatrix but I didn't see any real emotion in him. I thought he might be a little more excited or nervous or something when he saw the Death Eaters but he didn't portray too much emotion. Or at least, it didn't come across that way.

I do like his character though. I think it's interesting the way you chose to have a Muggle thrown into the midst of a magical war and I'm really excited to see how this plays out. :)

Cheers.

~Marissa

Author's Response: I'm glad you enjoyed Bellatrix I really enjoyed writing her. She's so sick and twisted I think, although its a stretch, that she'd look for any advantage for herself with VOldemort gone...even using a muggle...as a slave.that'd be okay ;)

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