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Review:marissa lily potter says:
Hi there!

Pansy is slowly becoming one of my favourite characters to read fan fictions about. I never thought much of her until one of my friends started writing a Pansy story and I found that she was so much more intriguing and exciting than anyone could have given her credit for. At first, I was apprehensive about reading a story about Pansy but you've done so so so well at keeping her character consistent.

She was prejudiced and narrow-minded but also caring and charismatic. I love that you showed two sides of her; both of which are very relatable and very believable. I like that you put her in a setting outside of Britain. I always felt like after the war people would try and move away and although you didn't mention anything about her moving away due to the war, it was still nice to see that she could start a new life in America.

I felt a real connection to Pansy. She was easy to feel sympathy for. I could see her still living with the same prejudices she was taught during her school years but also, I could see her living as an adult. It was very easy to imagine everything that you were writing about. The best part was that it all made sense. I like the connections that you made, especially to the way Pansy acted towards werewolves because of what she was taught, It's so easy to have a misconception due to inaccurate information and I completely believe that was Pansy's entire problem.

As for flow of the story, I thought you did a really good job with the flow! Even though Pansy was telling a story and it moved from scene to scene pretty quickly, nothing felt choppy or out of place. You were very descriptive and it made it really easy for me to imagine that I was the one that Pansy was talking to and retelling the story for. I really felt like I was listening to Pansy tell me about her experience first hand and that was a wonderful feeling.

I felt so bad for her at the end! Poor John! I really grew attached to him in the short moments that we met him. It seemed like him and Pansy got along so well and I could really picture them together. Their relationship seemed like it was doing very well and I was really upset to see it break apart like that. But I think John leaving was the wakeup call that Pansy needed. I understand why you needed to do it and although I'm upset by it, it was such a good turning point!

I really enjoyed reading this story. It was very different from what I usually read but I loved how well written and well thought out it was. You are a fantastic writer and I love reading your work! ^.^


Author's Response: Hey Marissa,

Thank you for another wonderful review! You write such detailed responses!

I'm so happy that Pansy is becoming one of your favorites. I think in general, she comes off as so one-note because most people just make her an ugly, mean person. I think most people are deeper than just good or bad, so I wanted to try and make her a little more human.

You have no clue how happy I am to hear that you could connect with Pansy and even felt sympathy for her at points. I love trying to make the bad guys somewhat sympathetic.

Flow was my biggest concern because I literally tried to write this as if the person was talking. It was originally supposed to be an article for The Daily Prophet, but due to site rules I had to change it. It made me fear that the way the story was told would come off weird.

Thank you so much for saying that I'm a fantastic writer. It really makes my heart happy.

I appreciate you taking the time out to read and review this.


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