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Review:marissa lily potter says:
Hi!

This is such a cute beginning to the story! I love Fred and George and am so partial to them but this was great nevertheless. To read about their nervousness at being sorted into different houses made me feel so nervous for them (even though I already knew they'd be Gryffindors haha). I thought that was very adorable and a very real issue. I can't imagine growing up with someone who was practically the same person as you only to fear that you might be separated for the next seven years!

I'm getting a little ahead of myself though. The beginning of the story was very catching. It got my attention right away. There was just enough mystery to keep me wondering what was happening but not too much where I was completely lost. Hmm, Katherine Rowle. I see what you did there with the last names haha. I wonder how this relationship is going to play out!

For the first chapter, this was absolutely great. I liked that you introduced us to some familiar characters and you gave us a bit of background information on the situation. You've stayed true to Fred & George (I'm a bit of a stickler for canon when it comes to characterization) and I really appreciate that. They're funny even at such a young age! I also like the jabs made at Percy. xD I can really see him trying to tell them what to do.

The story definitely kept my attention. Right from the beginning till the end. I thought that Elizabeth's character was a little off in that I couldn't really feel the emotions she was trying to portray but we only saw her in the beginning and I'm assuming she is now dead so that's not an issue. :)

The scene on the train felt a bit choppy to me but I know those scenes can always be awkward and I totally feel you on that. I just thought I'd point it out anyway. I like the direction that this seems to be going in. I know this was just the prologue but you set it up well by introducing some of the characters that Fred & George will be friends with.

I honestly thought this was a really nice beginning and I'm excited to continue reading and see how the story pans out!

~Marissa

Author's Response: Hey Marissa, thank you for the review, I really appreciate it :)

I happy to see that, I had to have them be nervous for the sorting I mean they're only eleven it had to have been an issue for them. I'm glad to see I had a bit of mystery in there as for Miss. Rowle's relationship with George you'll have to read later on to find out :p

I love Fred and George and I'm happy that you think I did a good job characterizing them :) I'll have to fix Elizabeth's part because I really want her to portray panic and fear.

I'll fix the choppiness ASAP, I'm trying to edit the story to the best of my ability, either that or I'll try and get a beta reader.

Thank you again for the review

Ida


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