I'm sorry...I didn't like it...
I JOKE OBVIOUSLY! (You actually believed me though, didn't you? Will you ever believe people when they tell you that you are amazing?)
For every painful day you made me wait for this (and let's face it, there was about a million of them) my expectations for this chapter got higher and higher. You didn't disappoint. At all.
I'm not even sure where to start with all of the amazing things in this chapter. I love that you always have a lovely (albeit heartbreaking) balance between Jo's developing friendship with Fred before the war and her ever-growing love for George after the war. I'm not sure which one makes me more sad; the fact that she and Fred are so well-suited in friendship and that one day that will be taken away from her, or that Jo and George's loss of Fred is so evident and painful for both of them in the second part of this chapter. My poor heart.
Your attention to detail is, as always, absolutely on point. You never forget the magic. From the enchanted receipt paper, to the Quick Quotes Quill's scathing comments, and the poo related products (which just reminds me how hilarious you are and how immature I am that it made me laugh so much).
I have so many mixed emotions about Jo's inner monologue. Everything she thinks when she's with George makes me want to burst with love for how she feels about him, but I find myself shouting at the screen because she won't say them out loud! Though, that may be a good thing because if she suddenly started telling George that she loves him after months of barely saying a word to him he'd probably find her really intense and scary-which definitely isn't the ending I want for this story. (Side note, I don't want any end to this story.) When she does finally speak to him in the "You miss him" moment, I knew exactly what she really meant by that before you went on to explain it. The wonderful thing about Jo for me is how well I feel like I know her, I know what she really means when she does speak and I understand how torn and tormented she feels even before Fred's death. It's incredible that this is a character you've created, not one that I've gotten to know throughout seven books. In just five chapters, Josephine has become as familiar to me as any one of JKR's characters.
I really need to learn to prepare myself for heartbreak before reading the updates for this story. I forgot how much your writing kills me in my excitement at reading the update and was totally not ready for the end of this chapter. Can we not just have it where Fred didn't die and no-one died in his place and George and Josephine fall in love and they all live happily ever after? No? Okay. Even though I understood George's anger at Josephine following Fred's orders, part of me was so mad at him for being mean to her. DOES HE NOT REALISE SHE LOVES HIM?! And the fact that she saved his life in the battle and he only just found out...seriously, woman. It's just so fitting with Josephine's character that she didn't use that as a way to get close to him, or get him to talk to her. The most amazing thing she could ever do for him and she's kept that to herself. Crazy, wonderful girl.
There were times in my constant pestering for this update that I felt guilty and that maybe I should stop but I am so glad I didn't because this chapter was just beyond perfect. You're in for a tough month during NaNo!
Wonderful, amazing, brilliant chapter. Love love love!
Author's Response: DEE!!! :-D
...OMG SO MEAN!!!
Oh... I see what you did there... :-p (Also... maybe... but only for a second! hehehe Also, gah! Stahp it. *hugs*)
MANY PAINFUL DAYS OF WRITING AND WAITING, I KNOW, BUT THANK YOU, THANK YOU, THANK YOU FOR SAYING THAT! *breathes epically huge sigh of relief*
Ugh, you are too much. Thank you. And I am right there with you. Even in the humorous moments, there's a bittersweet edge to it all because we know it's the past, and that the future is so not the same anymore. :( FRED. WHY DID YOU HAVE TO DIE? Of course... if he'd lived, I'd probably never have come up with this story idea, so... you win some, you lose some?
HAHAHA The poo jokes. I couldn't not. If you think you're immature for laughing, you should have seen the process of putting all of that together! LOL I enjoyed it way too much. Anyway, THANK YOU! I'm actually insanely relieved that you enjoyed the enchanted receipt paper and the Quick Quotes Quill details, cause I struggled for a long time with how to get those things to make sense without spending too long trying to explain what they actually do! Phew! :-D
ISN'T SHE SO FRUSTRATING!? I am right there with you. It's difficult because she's not just hurting herself by holding it all in, but George! If she said those things, she could help him! But she's in a place right now where she's honestly more self-preserving than selfless. Hopefully she works through that eventually. ;) Eep! I'll be sad to see this story end one day, too (thank you! *hugs*), but I'm so excited for the finale I have planned, that I'll get over it, and I hope it'll be worth it for you too! And ugh! How do I even respond to that? I'm just so blown away by how much you get Jo and how attached you've become to her. Like... I can't even. There are no words. *hugshugshugs*
GAH! Again, how do I respond to your ridiculously kind words?! I'm so grateful you feel that way about my writing and that it moves you and breaks your heart a bit, cause... yeah, that's what I'm going for at the moment! Muahaha! Also... no. If I were nicer, I definitely would have let Fred live and made Jo less skittish and made George love Jo back, BUT... clearly I'm evil. :-p "DOES HE NOT REALISE SHE LOVES HIM?!" hahaha There are so many things I want to say in response to this, BUT I CAN'T! YOU'LL JUST HAVE TO READ ON!!! hehehe But yeah, George's anger I felt was at least somewhat justified, it's just upsetting that Jo is taking the brunt of it. And as far as her having saved George... it's kind of a double-edged sword, isn't it? I think Jo must see it the same way as George - that if she'd been with Fred instead, he might still be alive. Anyway, war flashback scenes are coming, so we'll get a closer look at that! :-D
And don't feel guilty. Not even for a second. This chapter happened only because of you, and I could not be more grateful for that. *hugs* Is it wrong that I'm actually excited for NaNo pestering because I'm so stoked to get this story continually updating? Eep! We're gonna have fun, methinks. ;)
Gah, you're so beyond wonderful. 'Thank you' doesn't even begin to express my gratitude towards you. And this review is to die for. You're just the greatest. Thank you, Dee! I LOVE YOU! MWAH!