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Review:DarknessIsMyOnlyFriend says:
The punctuation and paragraphs were much better in this chapter!

I'm glad you still make Kai so surprised about all things magical. After all it is new to him, but you point out the right things. Like the missing oars on the boats. Or that the name Potter would cause such reaction.

And you had Luna bring them into the great hall. I love Luna. I'm glad she is a part of your story.

Slytherin is fitting for the way you have described Kai so far. Very interesting! I like that you made him become friends with Albus on the train. It shows that there is more to someone than the reputation of the house. People usually make it very obvious to which house people belong, you steered clear of that. Even though this was not out of the blue either. It really fits with the way you've written Kai so far.

There were some small typo's:
- When the hat it talking to Kai : 'you can talk to me though thinking'...I think it should be through?
- the sentence: The rest of the sorting went by...a old women: this should be 'an' old woman.
- Thank you Miss Lovegood, know then...: now then?
There were a few more, but with another look over I am sure you could easily find them.

Author's Response: Hello thank you for your review. I am glad you like Luna and that Kai is in Slytherin. Spelling is a little bit difficult but i'll take on your advice and check more clearly for typo's.

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