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Review:UnluckyStar57 says:
Hello! I'm finally here with your review! :D

Alright, so this is a very interesting beginning! I think that science and magic would be cool counterparts, and they don't interact nearly often enough. I think you've set up the science part really nicely, which will enable you to explore science as Annett goes to Hogwarts. I'm sure she'll do a lot of science experiments and observation when she gets there. :)

As for Annett herself, I think she's intriguing. She's really lucky to be the daughter of two people who allow her to explore her powers on her own, but she seems so very serious in this chapter, especially since she's just a child at this point. Well, I'm not saying that children can't be serious, but the part about her recording her interactions with her peers kind of made me sad. It seems like she's never had many friends, maybe because she's just so smart and isolated from the Muggle kids by her powers...? The university-level chemistry and biology thing was a bit shocking to me as well--I can't even fathom knowing those subjects on a high school level, but I can see that Annett is just the type to seek out this knowledge and learn it for herself. So while I haven't warmed to her yet, I can definitely tell that it's going to be cool to see what she gets up to at Hogwarts. Good job with creating an interesting and complex character who is so very young! She's unlike other ten and eleven-year-olds, but that makes her unique and memorable, definitely. :D

I was rather uncertain about Teddy Lupin, simply because the changing of his hair should be something that he can control when he's around Muggles. After all, he wouldn't want to give the parents heart attacks! But Annett was obviously intrigued, and I think her parents would have been okay if Teddy's hair changed in front of them. They're scientific and accepting of interesting things like that. Just as long as he can control it for people who might not be as willing to accept the idea of magic...

Question: Did Annett buy The Monster Book of Monsters for Care of Magical Creatures? I mean, did she buy it at all, or did she just look at it? The only problem that I have with her buying the book is that only third years and above are allowed to take Care of Magical Creatures--it's an elective. However, now that I think about it, I can see her buying it just so she can figure out how it works and what sorts of creatures there are in the magical world. Maybe you could include a statement about that, like whether or not she bought it to peruse for fun?

Although she's such a serious one, I think it's very realistic that you wrote her being afraid to leave her parents for the first time. That's an awesome thing to think about--older kids might be okay with it, even excited to get away from their parents, but an eleven-year-old who's never really left home before would be absolutely terrified. Still, I'm sure that she'll have lots of fun at Hogwarts. :)

I think you did a brilliant job on this chapter! I know that I mentioned a lot of things that I was uncertain about, but they're actually minor details that are super nitpicky. Your writing style is really different and cool. I can't wait to read more from you!


Author's Response: UnluckyStar57,

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I really appreciate it. :)

Annett is isolated because of her abilities. Her parents don't want to risk her abilities being witnessed by anyone to keep her safe. That being the case, they homeschool her. Homeschooling is what has allowed her educational advancement.

Haha. She did not buy the book, she was just almost bitten by one whose belonged to another student. I will see if I can for this explanation somewhere. Thank you.

Annett is an introvert. So her having fun depends on what she does and what she finds as opposed to who she meets. That's not to say that she doesn't meet people.

Thank you so much for all your compliments, too! :D


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