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Review:Ribbons says:
Hey Kristin!

I loved this chapter. It was really, really great. I loved all the Sirius/Melanie interactions, as well as the Lily and James stuff that happened.

I also ADORED the tiny part about Lancelot the cat. I know, I'm weird. What can I say?

My one suggestion is for you to go into a little bit more detail about the death eater attack, like the panic in the corridors and what everyone was doing and what ministry employees were there etc. I also found myself wishing for Sirius and James's reactions, which might be a little weird.

So, that's it for now because I really want to read the next chapter.

Lots of love,

Alena

Author's Response: Hey Alena! Aw, I'm so glad to hear that! It's wonderful to hear that you like Sirius and Melanie. And yes - we are finally getting into the part of the story where there's chemistry between James and Lily too. :P

One of my favourite things to write is just the little, trivial daily life things (which, I suppose this story is just a lot of those little things strung together, haha) so I'm glad you appreciated the bit about Lancelot! :D

Ah, yeah you're right that definitely would have been nice to add! I think for Melanie it was just general confusion, so her thoughts aren't very clear about exactly what is going on where. Unfortunately with first person it limits the accessibility to other people's reactions, and things are seen through her lens... Or it could be because I wrote this part of the story around three years ago and I just wasn't as descriptive of a writer back then :p

Thanks so much for your review! Hope you continue to enjoy :)



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