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Review:kenpo says:
Hey! I'm so sorry that I'm taking so long with these. I haven't forgotten, I promise!!
(So much reviewing, so little time left on my battery...)

Just commenting on something I'd commented on earlier - it makes more sense that the entire Weasley clan would go on holiday together as a very special occasion. Thanks for the clarification that this isn't a yearly spectacle.

One thing that I'm still confused about: Does Al know her name? It's just a tad confusing because I don't remember her actually introducing herself, but in the narration it uses her name, and it confuses me a little because I don't know if I missed something.

The other little thing is that I'm not sure if she'd say bloke, because I'm not sure how widespread that slang is.

I really enjoyed all of their interactions! I can already see how much chemistry they have, and the way that they sort of play off one another. Persia's story is sad - I can see why she ended up just being a really guarded thief. She says that it's fine, but it obviously isn't, and I'm curious to see how the fact that she keeps all of that bottled in will effect her character.

I liked how confused Al was about why people were so grateful for a few coins. Along with how not concerned he was when he lost his gold, that really shows how different he is. And how well off he is.

Cliffhanger ending!! Did Persia have something to do with it, or is it that guy Persia was with earlier? I don't remember his name...

I could see it being him, if he wants to make sure that nobody gets close to Persia or feels that it's his job to protect her.

This story is getting really interesting, and I look forward to reading more!!

-Georgia

Author's Response: HI! I completely understand how life can be overwhelming & I am just happy you even review b/c I know some challenges I won, I never got my prize! LOL so take all the time you need. =)

Okay, so now that you mention it, I messed up! She never DID introduce herself yet. LIKE Oh my Merlin how could I forget that? I think in my mind since I knew her name, he did as well which made no sense whatsoever. After this, I realize the story needs to undergo major editting before the next chappie.

I am glad as a reader you see right through Persia. She indeed is a girl with struggles that burden her social interactions with others as well.

And I love doing cliffhangers, it always have readers wondering. LOL

Thanks again for reviewing!


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