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Review:MargaretLane says:
*grins at the term "parchment-infested"* Really gives the impression of how she feels about the amount of parchment around her and probably about the amount of paperwork she has to do.

And it's interesting to get Dorcas's point of view, so we see that she isn't actually suspicious of Snape, just upset that the family of somebody she knew were killed.

OK, that comment about capturing by any means possible is somewhat creepy. Reminiscent of the Tans and their methods, which involved burning and looting cities.

And I feel it should be "couldn't care less," not "could care less". I've heard of "could care less" being used in the U.S, but I don't think they use it in the U.K.

I love the reference to Dorcas's father leaving when things got rough. It's nice to see all the variations in how people deal with these kind of situations.

Hmm, I wonder what didn't make sense in the guy's report, if he has something to hide.

LOVE the stories mothers tell children about the evil man who turns your head into a pumpkin and the little gnomes. Those sound exactly the sort of things mothers WOULD tell magical children to keep them out of dangerous places. Touch of fairy tales about them.

And that is typical of Dumbledore and fits so well with what we know he offered Draco - to try and protect people in danger from Voldemort even when their own actions may have contributed to putting themselves in danger.

Hmm, Dorcas really does seem to have high expectations from people. I wonder if that's just because it seems like quite a common attitude in the wizarding world, at least among Gryffindors or if there is some particular reason, possibly connected with her father's disappearance.

I don't think "fortune teller" should be all one word, at least not without a dash.

1981 and the Ministry getting tough. *shivers* OK, that comment probably makes no sense and of course, it would have had to be 1981 if Snape is beginning to doubt his involvement with the Death Eaters, but 1981 was the year the hunger strikers died in Northern Ireland.

*grins* They're not that long out of school, although maybe it's a sign I'm getting old that 21 and 18 don't seem that far apart. They sure did when I WAS 18. Or 21 for that matter. I guess a good deal of maturing takes place in those years.

That's an interesting idea - to have wizards working on a way to make a smaller amount of a potion have the same effect.

Author's Response: Hi again!

One of the things I tried to do with this story is show how people in bad situations had to make the best choices they could, even if all of their choices were bad. This was my first novel-length writing, and I look back on it every now and then to remind myself of things I learned from writing it. It's kind of a testament to my progress. Some of the things I got right, and others, well I flaied around until it was as close as I could get it at the time. Dorcas' character was one of those.

It's always crazy to assume that one year, you're trying to protect "children" and then all of a sudden, they're full-grown adults and completely capable of making serious decisions about their own lives. Wow. What a thing. It happens to everyone, I guess.

Potions fascinate me. So does chemistry. I decided I'd try to combine the two and see what happens. Hopefully it doesn't go "boom". :)

Thanks for another great review, and for taking a tour across my author's page!


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