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Review:kenpo says:
Hello! Number two!!

Oooo, we got a little more information here! I really liked this chapter!

The beginning with all the cousins made me laugh. I'm glad you included Hugo! He's so often left out of fics completely.

I love the way you weave beautiful descriptions into the story. I'm not sitting down to read 2000 words of just description, but you don't leave it out. It was very nice and very balanced.

I was a little bit confused by how we learned her name, though. It seemed really abrupt and... confusing.

They clearly have a lot of chemistry! I do wonder whether or not some of that is artificial and magical, though. She's just getting more and more mysterious, isn't she?

And I'm curious about how that other guy is going to play into the story.

Great chapter! I look forward to the next one!

-Georgia

Author's Response: Hi, again. Thanks again for reviewing as requested. ^__^

Yes, I wanted to show the entire clan is there including as you said, the underdogs like Hugo! =)

Thanks so much. I been told many times descriptions are a strong point of mine. =)

I was tired of saying "She" And I realize after reading it again, it was abrupt and didn't flow nicely. I need to edit it when maybe Ramsey calls after her or something.

I'm glad you like their chemistry. I was really nervous about doing a love story b/t two people who just met. Usually love fic starts with at least an acquaintance. Yes, she really grabs Al's curiosity.

Again, thanks again! =D


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