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Review:MargaretLane says:
Dorcas Meadowes is a rather interesting character, as we know virtually nothing about her.

Brilliant use of description again. I am useless at physical description, so it always impresses me to see it done well.

Leaving school is such a huge upheaval. It's like everything you've ever known is about to change and at the same time, you have the stress of taking the most important exams of your life, at least thus far. And of course, for your characters, they also have a war to contend with.

Yikes, that is rather a lot to ask of somebody who is still at school, but it is totally in character for Dumbledore to do so. He asks a lot of others, but even more of himself.

This probably isn't a critique worth making, as it's obviously important to the story that it should be as it is, but I do think you seem to have rather a lot of the Order of the Phoenix around the same age here. It strikes me as likely that most of the Order would be a lot older than Lily and James. And if Alice is Alice Longbottom, then wasn't she an Auror who had already defied Voldemort three times by the time Lily was 20 or 21? So if Auror training is three years, it's likely she would have been older than 21 by the time she'd been an Auror long enough to defy Voldemort three times, marry and have a child. Especially since James and Lily were SO young becoming parents, it seems likely that the parents of most of Harry's classmates would be significantly older. I realise the story probably wouldn't work if she were ten years older than Lily though.

*laughs at James's behaviour being described as borderline-stalker*

LOVE the imitation of Petunia's disapproving face.

In "don't lose that fire, Lils," I think there should be a comma before "Lils". And again, there should be a comma before "my lovely little Lily", when you write, "have a good holiday, my lovely little Lily."

Aw, I really like the way Dorcas is so protective of Lily.

And I like the way Marlene knows Dorcas well enough to guess pretty closely what's going on; at least that there is something she's not telling her and possibly something she doesn't feel it's safe to reveal to her.

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