OK, this is a day late, but I was busy yesterday.
I love stories about OC teachers. I like to read about OCs because there is a huge wizarding world and the books only explore so much of it. And I like reading about teachers, because its a career in which you have to cover up a lot of your own insecurities and worries, so it's interesting to see what they think behind it.
LOVE the idea of McGonagall having been the same since she was at school.
Yikes, that line where she first feels somebody is watching her sent shivers down MY spine. I wonder if somebody really is and if so if their intentions are malign.
Oh, and I've just realised this is probably during the era when each Defence Against the Dark Arts teacher only lasts a year, so probably something will cause her to leave before the end of the year. And a couple of lines later you actually mention that. *laughs*
Ahhh, Rookwood. I'm pretty sure his reasons for wanting to suggest her position may be dangerous are not in order to help her.
Hmm, she does seem to panic rather a lot at the sight of the Dementor. Of course, it is an unpleasant experience and it makes sense she'd be worried about her nieces, but she's a Defence Against the Dark Arts teacher and she repelled it fairly easily, so she seems rather more upset than I would have expected. I wonder if there is more to that.
SO like Dumbledore to find the Patronuses amusing. I suspect he would also be gratified to know the students can defend themselves against Dementors though, considering his hatred of them.
I'm sort of intrigued by the way nobody is there when she looks. Part of me feels that maybe there is nothing there and she is just worrying too much, but another part of me thinks it has something to do with Rookwood, that he is watching her for some reason.
Interesting the feeling of being watched disappears when she's away from Hogwarts. That MAY mean that whoever is watching her is around Hogwarts only and doesn't follow her into London. Or maybe it's just harder to follow somebody in a busy city.
So like Dumbledore to decide she'd be safer not knowing what's going on.
I wonder what Fenrir Greyback wants with her. This is intriguing.
Poor Aminta. That attack seems to have had some pretty unpleasant effects. I hope she feels better soon.
And I wonder what Dumbledore means about it possibly being his fault. Maybe it's just because of the curse on the Defence Against the Dark Arts teacher. Or maybe there's something more to it.
Yikes, I'd forgotten Tom Riddle was at school around the same time as McGonagall. I was wondering why you'd had Aminta at school with her, but I assumed you just wanted to create a friendship between them.
Hmm, that part about the howling possibly coming from her mind makes me wonder how much she might be imagining. From what Minerva says, it doesn't sound as if she is though. But she does seem very stressed, with the difficulty sleeping and all. I suppose it's hardly surprising when she has reason to believe somebody may be targeting her and doesn't know why or what it is she needs to try and protect herself from.
And I wonder why Minerva is looking at her in sorrow. How has being Defence Against the Dark Arts teacher put her at risk? I am rather intrigued.
And even after finishing it, I remain intrigued. I assume he kills her, but it's not certain.
Really excellent story. I'd love to get the full story, but then maybe the slight uncertainty is part of what makes it so brilliantly creepy.
Author's Response: Wow this review is fantastic! Thanks :)
This particular story is a side one-shot to "Unsinkable", so Aminta is a character seen in that story and not all the events are shown - the two sort of complete the story taken together. At the end of Unsinkable, her body is found in the Forbidden Forest, mauled by a werewolf.
I am not a horror writer, so this was my attempt at being scary. I wanted to show her gradually becoming more unhinged through the school year, so her reactions are sometimes overwrought, although with the dementor, it's more that it came after children that horrifies her. Maybe if you're not a mother, the reaction wouldn't be as strong. I didn't really think of that at the time I wrote this.
And yes, I put her with McGonagall because McGonagall and Tom Riddle were school contemporaries, and I found it interesting that apparently no one much remembered him even though he'd gotten that Award for Special Services. He must have taken out the people who knew things but wouldn't join his cause. Aminta knew more about him than usual because she'd had a bit of a crush on him. That's where I was going with that.
Greyback was meant to keep an eye on her, but he's a loose cannon. Definitely unpleasant effects from that one.
Thank you so much for reviewing. I'm glad to know this story still works without having read Unsinkable, and is still creepy. Writing creepy/scary is really hard to do! lol