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Review:MargaretLane says:
OK, Karkaroff is an interesting character to write about. He's a bit mysterious in the series. We're not sure quite how he got involved with Voldemort or why he got out. Was it just fear or did he realise what he was doing was wrong? WAS he teaching Dark Arts to his students? Looking forward to seeing how you portray him.

Hmm, you've created a bit of suspense as to what his plan actually is.

I'm guessing when he says he'll be the second most powerful wizard, he's thinking of Voldemort as the first, but who knows?

This is VERY nit-picky, but I'm not sure Karkaroff, who apparently lives and works somewhere in Eastern Europe would speak of "the Ministry" with Lucius. I would image he'd say "the British Ministry" or "your Ministry." To him, "the Ministry" is probably that of wherever Drumstrang is.

Hmm, you really are stacking up the mysteries here. There now seems to be something of a mystery as to why the Potions master employed Snape. Does he need an assistant for some reason? Or does he suspect Snape? Is he keeping an eye on him? OR does he WANT Snape to leak information, as a way of supporting Voldemort without it being possible for anybody to trace the leak back to him. I really doubt the last one, but you never know.

And hmm, his boss seems to know he's made contact with the Death Eaters and while he's annoyed, he doesn't seem inclined to report him to the authorities or fire him. This is quite intriguing.

I LOVE the way you create a similarity between the path to becoming a Potions master and the one to becoming a master craftsman in the Middle Ages.

It seems like Snape has been coerced into supporting the Death Eaters in this version. That would explain why Dumbledore stood up for him so vigorously and why he was so sure he would not betray them afterwards.

I wonder if Dorcas Meadows has some idea where his allegiances lie. She would have known of his reputation at school, probably, if she's around the same age so it's possible she could make a good guess.

Author's Response: Hi!

This is sort of backwards to your review order, but I'm quite behind on my responses. So I'm just jumping in.

I thought Karkaroff was an interesting character as well. I picked him mainly because he seemed important, but he wasn't completely fleshed out, so it gave me room to play the "what if" game without having to contradict canon.

You're right with your points. This was my first novel-length anything and I wasn't very grounded with certain things... like Karkaroff's personal inclinations. I guess that's what happens when you're too hung up over your main characters. I call this story my learning curve. It's nice to see what other people pick out of it. I take those ideas and try to incorporate them into the stuff I'm moving forward with. Live and learn, right?

You don't know how happy you made me when you picked out the similarities between the Potion Masters Guild and the medieval craftsmen. I thought it was a cool idea, and also very logical, given that the wizarding world seemed stuck in time on certain things.

I really, REALLY tried to give Snape a story that would explain his actions without excusing them. I hope that comes across later, if you continue reading.

Thanks for the review!

Pix


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