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Review:jessicalorewrites says:
Hi! Here for the review swap :) I chose this one because I've been lacking in JILY FEELS recently and decided I needed to read some more cutesy fluff. And boy did you deliver!

Humour is something I'm always wary of in fics because sometimes it seems very forced but here I found it flowed well with the plot and pace and seemed very typical of the Marauders and the way you characterised them. The banter at the start about James setting Moony on Sirius made me giggle :3

Ahh I have to say though I love that you decided on what approach to take with Lily and STUCK TO IT! Many authors say things like 'Lily is so fiesty' etc but they never really show it... here, you definitely do. She's violent and erratic and everything you say that she is. And I love it! Yet there's also the softer, questioning side which makes her more three dimensional.

The only thing that really stood out to me as off was that Lily had been talking for 2+ hours. A little unrealistic, I'm sure she'd get tired of talking or run out of things to say in that time... James would probably get bored too :p

Other than that, I enjoyed this lots :D great start -- and thanks for my review!

xo

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