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Review:MargaretLane says:
OK, this is probably the most original beginning to a story I ever read. I thought the first part was an A/N actually, with the whole "welcome" part, but it quickly became clear it was a character speaking when they spoke of "us" and then they announced they were the murderer. Hmm. Intriguing.

I like the fact you've chosen comparatively minor characters to make up the cast of this. It leaves us more in the dark as to who the murderer might be, because, while we feel we've a handle on what Ron, Harry, Hermione, Dumbledore, etc would be likely to do, people like the Patils and Michael Corner are less easy to predict.

Yikes, that comment about how now the others aren't going to be able to get away implies this person implies to do quite a bit of killing. And they are so casual about it.

One thing I always find bizarre in detective stories is that whenever anybody seems nervous, everybody's like "what are they hiding?" and it always turns out they are hiding something. Like finding out you're in a house with a murderer isn't ENOUGH to make people nervous, not to mention being questioned by the police.

So it's not Pansy, as the narrator is speaking about her as another person. That narrows my suspect list down to seven, unless of course, that's some kind of bluff.

Michael and Theo are also mentioned, but I'm not so sure those mentions aren't bluffs, whereas the narrator really doesn't seem to know whether or not Pansy killed her husband. Although the reference to not blaming Theo makes it seem like it's not him either. Hmm. I kind of wonder if there's some bluff though, because I doubt you'd let us narrow it down that easily. The narrator DOES say Theo is first and that they are in the middle though, so unless they are unreliable...

I'm wondering why the narrator thinks Harry wouldn't interview the son of a Death Eater first.

Hmm, the indication that they are prepared for this implies the crime was premeditated.

This person's knowledge of the Muggle world and their apparent familiarity with Muggle detective stories makes me wonder if they might be a Muggleborn or half-blood. I can't see Theodore Nott or Pansy Parkinson wondering why the wizarding world hadn't caught up with the Muggle one.

The fact that the person seems to be hinting at a man makes me wonder if they might be a woman, although of course, the police are hardly going to believe the person they "overheard" is themself anyway, so not necessarily.

And I LOVE the whole invisible cord thing.

Really interesting first chapter. I'm intrigued. I want to know who the villain is.

Padma is one person who could well have a motive, though you'd sort of expect the Aurors to react if it was Parvati's sister who mentioned overhearing somebody speaking about Parvati's sister.

Author's Response: Wow, thank you SO much for that massive compliment! The idea for writing a murder mystery from the murderer's perspective popped into my head a few weeks ago and I couldn't resist writing it once I'd worked the details out. I'm so glad that you thought it was original!

Part of the reason for choosing more minor characters is that I'm more comfortable writing them than I would be with others, but also because it's harder for people to predict what they might do, so I'm pleased that you liked that choice! The killer's definitely quite casual about the situation at the moment, but things might change in the future. Haha yes, that's always struck me and there might be some secrets coming out in this story as well...

I don't want to say much more in this response other than that you're very good at picking up on all the clues that I've left in this chapter! Your reasoning makes a lot of sense and I think that some of your guesses are very interesting... I can't say more because I don't want to give the killer away yet!

I always think that Harry would be reluctant to tar anyone associated with Death Eaters with the same brush and instantly suspect them, since he did so much to try and end the prejudice there, but I'm not sure. I'm glad you liked the invisible cord idea! It was interesting to come up with some unusual and magical murder weapons and I liked that idea when I hit on it.

Thank you so much for this amazing review, I really am so glad that you enjoyed this chapter!

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