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Review:hangingwallflower says:
Overall, this was an interesting first chapter! It seems like a unique story so far. You have great details in your text and the main character sounds very complex - there's definitely a lot that you can do with her and it will be interesting to see how she'll get along at Hogwarts :) I loved the description of her background with her muggle scientist parents as well!

As far as things you can improve on - the ending of this chapter felt a bit rushed and cut short. You could definitely go back and expand on it a bit more, or have a more final conclusion/cliffhanger to it. There were also a couple of areas where there was maybe a bit too much description (for example, describing the descent of her friends). You could incorporate those details in a little later, it might just be a tad much for the introduction to this story.

Overall, however, I think this story is off to a wonderful start! It sounds very creative and unique and I enjoy your writing! Thanks for sharing this :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for taking the time to review, hangingwallflower. :)

And thank you for such brilliant advice! I will see about weeding out those unnecessary details.

Thank you for reading and I'm so glad you enjoyed it! :D

Cheers.


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