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Review:mymischiefmanaged says:
I really like James so far in this story. It's such classic arrogance to start talking to Annett when he realises she's doing something that will benefit him, but you manage to keep him likeable. I loved Al asking him whether he knew where the library was as well. I enjoyed Fred as well. I'd love to see more of him, Rox and James as they seem to be the trio of the year above.

I'd still like to see a more in depth portrayal of Scorpius. I don't feel like I know him as a character but I get the impression he's supposed to be quite important in Annett's life. It would be good to see more of who he is by himself before you put him with Rose.

Annett's thoughts about alchemy are original and interesting. The whole muggle science/magic link you're exploring is really unique and is definitely a great foundation for the story.

I'm interested in why Annett hasn't told anyone about her pranks. I get the impression the Wotters would like her for it, but I suppose she maybe doesn't want the attention.

Really good work. Well done

Author's Response: Thank you! I appreciate all your comments and suggestions. I will bring them over to review the next chapters I have written. :D

Scorpius was once about as shy as Annett as we've seen in the train ride, but now we see him feel completely comfortable around the Wotters. This idea will be built upon in later chapters. I will try to develop his character more given his future importance.

I'm relieved you don't find integrating science into magic off at all. It was a rather big concern of mine writing the story.

Annett hasn't told anyone about her pranks because she's been completely content carrying them out on her own, but now we've got more people pitching in to her pranks for Yang, we'll see how she reacts. . . ;)

Thank you again for all your reviews! I appreciate how much thought you put in them!



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