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Review:Machiko says:
Another great chapter!

How will your major edits affect the story?

Will I have to read it all over again?

How does Annett feel about Al?

Is loosing control of her facial expression and laughing her head off factor into her feelings for Al or is it a factor of her feelings for Al?

Author's Response: Dear Machiko,

Thank you! And thank you so much for your review and your questions! I hope you’ve been enjoying the reading so far.

About the major edits. They are only major to those who have not read what used to be the first five chapters. I’ve just compiled them into two chapters. There are changes, but they’re rather minor. It’s the same story, written slightly better.

About Annett’s feelings about Al, I’m so glad you caught that about her laughing!

She doesn’t dislike him. Obviously, why would she spend her time with him and his family and friends. She does spend more time with him than any other person at Hogwarts. As a side note: they share the same classes (which is possible because they’re both in Slytherin and in the same year and share similar interests).
He’s got the potential to have some really interesting, introspective, deep conversations with her because they’re both introverts (added to the fact they share similar interests, which we’ll see hints of in later chapters) and it’s what they could do.

Although to do that, she’d have to open up to him. See the problem?

One one hand, introverts can have really meaningful conversations that bring them closer together. On the other, she’s got this barrier around herself (which I believe I’ve mentioned to you before, if you are the same Machiko. If you aren’t, I’m really sorry.).

The barrier contains her emotions and her thoughts. She tries to tightly control what comes in and out. She is uncomfortable with vulnerability. We see that Al has the ability to reach into that barrier, even if just for a laugh.

In your opinion, what do you think would help their relationship progress? How much does he even know about her? Obviously more than his average classmate given that he’s not terribly frightened of her. Why hasn’t anyone, especially him, ask about how she’s come to know about such complex scientific concepts in the way she has?

In the chapter after the next, Chapter 7, they will very briefly talk about Al and Annett’s relationship and Annett will also explain more about how she deals with her emotions.

Cheers.


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