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Review:nott theodore says:
Hi, Jenna!

Yay, I finally made it back to this story! I've been missing your writing so much but now I'm back into reviewing again I'm determined to catch up so I can read and review these updates when they're actually posted!

This was such a great chapter to come back to! I loved the way that the whole chapter was set in the past, and it feels like this time Rose spent more time in the past that she did the first time that she visited. I wonder if that pattern's going to carry on, and she'll end up aging as she spends time in the past, but since time doesn't seem to be carrying on in the present, I wonder if she'll age ahead of her time? (Does that even make sense? It did in my head but I'm not sure if it did here :P)

Anyway, moving on from the incoherent musings... I liked the way that you took us back to Rose's arrival in the past, since we saw it from Richard's perspective in the last chapter. I thought you did a really great job of immersing us in the period straight away, and also tackling Agnes's speech, because not only does it sound older but she's using a certain amount of dialect too, which she would have done in those times, so it was great to see that you'd actually made the effort to include something like that. It helped to make it a lot more believable.

I really liked reading about Rose's reactions and thoughts as she arrived. She was unsure because it was a completely different place that she'd arrived in this time, but I wonder whether it's because this time, Rose didn't have any specific destination in mind when she tried to apparate? Her confusion was really believable and I liked the way that you described Agnes, that she seemed a bit scary by today's standards but Rose could see past that and see the kindness there.

Aw, I felt so sorry for Rose when Richard dismissed her, even though I'd already read about it in the last chapter. But it was sweet that she was so hopeful, even though she really barely knew Richard, and that she's already feeling that connection with him. It's going to be really interesting because now we've seen the first time that both of them have met the other, and I can't wait to see how the relationship develops from here!

I absolutely loved the detail and thought that you've put into creating this world, and the way that the magical world integrated with the world at this point in history. I sympathised with Rose when she was trying to work out how Richard fitted in with all the kings, because they definitely are confusing (even though I'm British :P). But I absolutely loved Agnes's character and the way that you used her to explore the situation for wizards at this point in time. It's so interesting to think that the lower classes would only have been able to afford to go to Hogwarts for a few years, and the subjects that they learnt there would be tailored to their futures. And then the way that they had to hide their magic, so Agnes and all her family members had returned to normal life and acted as the village wise woman. All of that detail was just so interesting to read about and made the chapter so rich to read!

I love the fact that Agnes is a witch though and understands Rose's abilities but also has that connection to Richard, because I think that makes a lot more sense when it comes to the two of them starting a relationship together. I can't wait to see how this continues!

Sian :)

Author's Response: Hi Sian!! :D

Ahh, I've been slowly working my way through all of your AMAZING reviews and I really don't know how to do them justice with these responses! I'm sorry for taking so long to reply, but thank you for taking the time to read my stories and leave such thoughtful reflections. You're an incredible reviewer.

Rose is definitely here to stay for a little while at least. That does make sense, and is one of the questions Rose is asking herself as she spends more time in the past. It's impact on her life depends, as if she spent years in the past that could mean years off her life in her own future. (now I'm not making any sense!).

I struggle a lot with the dialect and the speech patterns: obviously they can't really be accurate but I did want to try and separate the "norm" of speaking (Rose) from the oddness she would find in the language of Agnes and the others. I'm glad it makes it seem more believable! :)

Hmm, interesting theory about how the Apparating might work. :P It is quite tricky and Rose has no idea how to control the time travel at this point. I'm glad you liked Agnes, she is kind but also a little odd and I would probably be a little freaked out by her as well to be honest.

Richard is the only person Rose knows so far in the past, and so it fits that she would feel connecting to him. It's a bit of a paradox really. I love writing them together though, it's quite fun if a little hard to keep track of. :P

I'm pleased you like the detail! As you know I quite enjoy writing the historical details or at least trying to imagine what it might have been like. The kings are pretty confusing, and she wouldn't necessarily know much about the specific actors in the war of the Roses, not to mention that for now she just thinks he's some sort of duke.

I really liked thinking about class divisions at Hogwarts and how to tie in to the books. It's so cool, especially with the stigma against magic during that time and the lack of a Ministry.

Thanks so much for the wonderful review, Sian!! :D ♥


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