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Review:Gabriella Hunter says:
HELLO!

This is Gabbie from the forums with your review, my dear! Nice to meet you and all that junk. So, this was really unique! I'd never read anything like this before and I think the way you opened this chapter was very bold and very dark. Most stories don't open on such a violent event but I applaud you for having the courage and its very well written. I was able to feel every bit of pain that Cassie was going through and my heart stopped towards the end of that flash back.

I want to know what happened to her family even more now and what was happening for her town to be attacked. I hope you go into more detail later on! :D

Cassie herself seems like a really interesting character. She's confident, capable but also vulnerable and I think that makes her a bit more relatable as a person. There's something sensitive about her that I found very realistic and I hope we get to see more of that in the future. You didn't give any descriptions on her appearance, however aside from the scars and while I found that VERY cool (Most people wouldn't have done this) I'd like to have some inkling of her hair color or something. Not sure if you'd intended for her not to be described but I'm just a sucker for detail.

Now, the Colonel is horrible. I've written some awful fathers in my day but there's just something about this man that really made me angry and a little creeped out. Even though Cassie was adopted, he treats her with the same sort of regard he would a dog and that was not a pun. On one hand, I'm glad that she's away from him but on the other...I can't believe that he just kicked her out! I can't BELIEVE that he was going to MAKE her marry someone she didn't love!

I'd like to meet this boy that she deliberately pushed away too. Hah. Cassie was very proud of herself for that one!

Now, that ending shocked me. Lupin?! As in...Remus?! I have to know more now so don't be afraid to re-request!

I didn't spot too many problems but there are a few words that are missing in paragraphs but everything else seems pretty good.

Thanks for the read!

Much love,

Gabbie

Author's Response: Hi! Thank you for the review and sorry if it took so much to answer. RL sent me to a place where internet is almost non-existent.

I am glad the beginning made an impression on you... I wanted to make it "real", so that the reader would be able to see what was happening... And it looks like I did it! Yay!

As for Cassandra description, the lack of details regarding her physical appearance was made on purpose, because she'll be really carefully described in the other chapters. I understand your concern, I get so frustrated when an author doesn't describe characters or scenes accurately enough! In this case, however, it was inevitable and if you get on reading, and I really hope you do, you'll understand why.

Anyway, thank you again for your review, and I'll certainly re-request as soon as I can!


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