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Review:whykay says:
What the hell were Albus and Rose alluding to, in their own minds - I know you know that I know??

And why are you glaring at Matt, Scorpius? I thought you were past that?!!

Selena is training with Lisa to keep her mind off Matt - it is very un-Selena and yet, a case of once bitten twice shy?? And also, a very good opportunity for Selena to unearth Eva. And yes, Lillian spoke in arabic to Eva-Lisa? Does she know about Eva??

And last, but not the least - Albus and Lisa. I love Eva's transitioning - Trust, honesty and love - something she'd never seen before - made her react instinctively. I like it. And I like the contrast Thane brought to the scene right after. Eva has moved a step to being Lisa. It's almost like she is disappointed in him for being Raskoph's stooge (and safeguarding himself against any backlash wrt Scorpius).
She is thinking a lot more strategically, instinctively, placing herself in the big picture gradually. She keeps repeating the impending betrayal to herself to keep herself rooted to the plan and somehow, it works against her.

I can't help wonder - if Thane had shown a more 'human' interest in her, seen her as more than just a good wand, would she have served his purpose better? Would she have been more loyal?

I immediately drew an analogy to our more mundane non-magical lives - was Thane a bad boss? :D

I hope you feel better!! It is definitely downright unpleasant to feel cramped or cooped up!! And glad to hear about Starfall. I hope the third book in Stygian trilogy doesn't take long!

PS: I am reading your first book slowly so that I can read the second one without waiting! :)

Author's Response: That whole Rose-and-Albus thing was Albus having made a guess, and not being sure if Rose had made the same guess. Yeeeah, it didn't come out as well as I'd have liked and might never be directly alluded to. I think in the first draft, the topic came up in this chapter - you know what, I'll tell you next chapter, this idea did not work!

Scorpius is MOSTLY past it with Matt. It still irks him when his girlfriend and her ex-boyfriend talk nerdy to one another.

We'll see what's going on with Selena eventually. Certainly she's very shaken up by what happened in Tomar, and while she's not lying to Lisa about wanting to be better, this is not the whole truth. But yeah, those two spending more time together could have consequences for them both, and Eva is starting to learn to not underestimate her.

Lillian is the Chairman of the International Convocation and the Head of the British Department of International Magical Affairs. She's multi-lingual, and is trying to make sure the most mercenary member of the team knows she'll be paid for keeping the Five alive!

Eva's shaken, partly because the gang had begun to earn her loyalty without her realising it, and now she sees this. Thane has always acted like he cares for her, but the job comes first. In her more mercenary times she accepted that he'd protect her until it stopped being efficient or advantageous for him to do so. Now she's seeing the kind of unconditional care that the gang hold for one another, Thane's form of consideration just isn't the same any more. Don't think he doesn't care; his comments to her in Paris about her being more than just a killer, how he acted towards her in Badenheim - she is a trusted agent and confidante. But his priorities work differently.

I suppose Thane is as good a boss as a murderous mercenary can be. The problem is that his ethics are pretty skewed to begin with, and his way of life demands he sometimes puts himself first.

Soon - perhaps once I've finished Starfall - I will sort out the editing on my second book. So basically, one way or another, so long as I'm producing content, you'll have something to read! I'm so glad you're checking it out, though; it's something a bit different for folks on this site.

I'm going to try to set myself some daily writing targets this week. Once I get past this upcoming arc it SHOULD be plain sailing in the writing. The leg's getting better anyway, so, can't complain too much! Thanks for reviewing!


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