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Review:DracoFerret11 says:
Hello for the final time in this story. I'm so happy I read this. It was beautiful and meaningful and really, really lovely. So, let's go over things:

Lines: As I may have said before, I always mention lines when I feel that they're powerful. The one here was: "And without words, asked her to be his wife. And without words, she said yes." That was gorgeous. What a beautiful way to begin their new life together.

Idiosyncrasies: There were a couple of things that didn't make a lot of sense to me. First, when Rose cries in St. Mungo's you say that the lights are flickering, but if they're magical lights, that wouldn't happen. Also, you've called BLAISE Zabini BLADE Zabini. Was that intentional?

Plot: This was really lovely. I'm glad you brought Rose's fate into the story, but I didn't feel it was necessary for her to kiss Blaise at the end. I thought it was implied that they would help each other heal. I didn't think the kiss needed to happen, and it felt too forced to me. I liked Hermione and Draco's progressing relationship, though. Well done! This was such a sweet way to summarize everything that's happened.

Characterization: I think you wrote Hermione and Draco very well. Hermione comforting Rose was very realistic and sweet and moving. Rose herself was great. Her anger was perfect. I really believed that. I've grieved before, and that anger can be so powerful. I'm glad you included it.

Descriptions: I loved the emotional details you added about the rain. I do wonder, though, why it isn't constantly raining if every time someone magical grieves, it rains. But I loved how you wrote this. Well done.

This chapter was so sad and so moving. Hermione's relationship with her daughter was beautiful, and I loved her relationship with Draco. This story was great. Thanks for writing it!

--Emily (House Cup 2014 Review)

Author's Response: DracoFerret11,

I am pleased that you enjoyed reading this story and all of its 'no dialogue' until the end, very different kind of story. :)

Awe, you chose one of my favorite lines of this story, especially because of the challenge.

Lights flickering... I imagined the lights in the tunnel where Harry is with Dudley as they are attacked by Dementors. And I believe lights flickered when Dumbledore and Harry were in the subway. Anyway... If there is a difference in "magical" lights vs. normal, I am unaware.

And Blade would be Blaise's son, who would've been Scorpius' best friend in school and same age as Rose. Certainly, she would not be kissing Blaise, as he would be Draco's age. Sorry for the confusion. In this story, Blade would've been the best man at their wedding and the pain of losing his best mate, his anger had him losing his fiance. Their kiss was a parallel to Draco and Hermione's kiss. But with a deeper meaning because of guilt... literally kissing over his grave.

Again, the credit for emotions and weather goes to JKR when Ron caused it to snow inside Hogwarts when broken up with Lavender. That is how I got the idea for their grief to cause storms.

I think that the story needed closure for Rose. Yes, this was a Dramione story, but Rose needed an end as well. And, I thought bringing in a new love interest happened to fit.

Thank you so very much for your beautiful words of encouragement and so much depth. I appreciate it in every way.

Best wishes and many thanks,
Sincerely,
Dark Whisper


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