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Review:marauderfan says:
I'm not sure how I feel about Emily and Tristan going off to take hallucinogenic potions just after Laurel was carted away for over-hexing... they do seem to have themselves under control a bit more than she did, but maybe that's only temporary. Anyway, I loved the way you wrote that scene and what they saw and how time was folding in on itself like a fractal, it was beautifully written, kind of floaty.

The scene with Tristan and Emily in the hallway is really sweet, though slightly annoying to read because I know Emily knows Tristan's secret now, but I still don't! :p

Eleven-year-old Emily's way of introducing herself to Tristan is perfect and adorable. Okay, but now back to Tristan. Something doesn't add up. He says houses run in families, but his dad is a muggle and his mum (Mary Macdonald?) was a Gryffindor. I was just thinking about this and Mary would be way too young to be having kids at the time Tristan was born. My best guess is that Tristan was adopted, potentially from a family of pureblood dark wizards who gave him his middle name "R". So many questions. reading on now. :p Btw, the pacing of this story is excellent. There's enough info to progress the story, but you conceal enough to make me want to keep reading! Another great chapter!

House Cup Review 2014

Author's Response: Right!?! I think that Emily kind of realized there was something tacky and unwise about it--but Emily's also the most stable of the four. She's only charmed three times (the train, Hogsmeade, the Quidditch match) all term, so she isn't too worried about over-partying.

I really enjoyed writing the potion! Emily's visions are based a bit on some of the teenage philosophizing I did as a kid--the gist of which was "everything is connected, and it's all mushy." Plus, as I mentioned in the A/N, LOTS of research into real-world psychadelia. And I hope it comes across, but Emily's chapters change a bit after, in the way she thinks about things.

And yay, the introduction. Since this is a coming-of-age, I thought flashing back to them as children was important, because they're currently in their transition state.

And ah! What you said about things "not adding up" PERFECTLY mirrors something Isobel says in the most recently uploaded chapter! :D


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