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Review:adluvshp says:
House Cup 2014 Review.

Hi there! This was a cute little one-shot. I enjoyed your characterisation of a young, nervous Neville.
The scenarios he though of, for why Dumbledore called him, made me chuckle.
Poor thing, he worries too much, but I'm glad things turned out fine in the end xD
I liked how you wrote Dumbledore too. His manner of speaking was nicely done.
For CC, I'd say that I'd have liked to see some more of description in the story rather than straight off thoughts and dialogues. The narrative would have been a lot more fun to read with some visualisation, by adding details about the surroundings, and about the events happening.
Besides that, this made for a nice read and I enjoyed it. The concept was cute and over all presentation was good.

Cheers
-AD

Author's Response: Thanks so much for your review! :)

This was actually my very first challenge piece so it was a change for me! I remember writing this in probably oh, maybe forty-five minutes before the deadline was due so I agree it lacks the description I normally have.

I'm glad you enjoyed my first-year Neville! He's not my usual character to write so it makes me happy you think I characterized him well! Thanks again! :)
~MadiMalfoy x


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