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Review:randomwriter says:
House Cup 2014 Review

Hello :) I'm back as I absolutely loved your writing! I also find entries to the 'Every Word Challenge' really inspiring. I myself have never been able to do it, but I enjoy reading the works of those who have succeeded.

I'm a huge James/Lily shipper. I love the pairing, and as a result, I stray away from stories that feature the Snape/Lily pairing usually, unless there is some assurance that they don't violate canon. I had a feeling yours wouldn't. That being said, I like Snape as a character. He is complex and there is so much depth to his thoughts, actions and emotions. I will forever be caught in trying to understand him well enough.

You've depicted his emotions in this one-shot really well. The parts in brackets was very clever addition and it just gave this story, as well as his thoughts a lot of depth. You can clearly see how much he resents James; how much he does not want to protect Harry, but must because he is Lily's son; how guilty he feels (blaming Harry was a great touch, as was his realisation that he cannot blame Lily's child, no matter how hard he tries); and finally, his undying love for Lily.

That word always has so much meaning to those of us in this fandom, that we forget what it is really. An oath. You couldn't have written in better. To put it simply, it is an undying oath.

As for the writing, it is beautiful. Every word serves it's purpose. This is 500 words, well used and well written. But in all honesty, as much as the brevity of this impresses me, it's nothing on how you've managed to write this without using the letter E at all. I didn't realise earlier, but I chanced to glance on the story summary just now, in the middle of this review, and I scoured through the story and I was shocked. I never felt it's absence, not once! I didn't even notice. You really didn't use even the most basic, yet ever-useful 'the'?! :O I don't know how you managed this, or even how long it must have taken you, but this story is just great! A great example of exemplary writing! :)

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