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Review:Pretense Of Perfection says:
I really liked this one-shot, i'll have to check out the companion story. the Marauders era has always been my favorite, and this one is very well written. I think you managed to capture Lily's hurt and betrayal very well, even if it wasn't exactly from her own perspective. I can totally see this entire scene playing out just as you wrote it, with them sitting by the radio, Snape waiting outside the Fat Lady to try and ambush Lily and apologize, and Lily being so angry she refers to him by his surname. All of it. I think the title is a perfect fit for the story and you incorporated it well, as it was just one word that ruined their friendship. I didn't notice any spelling or grammar errors, and you did a perfect job with the pacing of the story.

--house cup 2014 review--
pretense of perfection, gryffindor

Author's Response: Hi!

I think you already have checked out the companion piece (The Orchard). I changed the title of it a while ago. :) I'm so pleased you thought I captured that moment. It's a heavy moment because she sees a glimpse of what Severus has become. A man who is going down a very dark path and she is faced with the fact she is part of what he hates. Not that he hates her, but hates her kind which is almost as bad. Everything she's ever known has fallen down around her. The fact that you're able to picture the whole thing is astounding to me. Thank you so much for the lovely words. I really enjoyed getting into her character a little more and trying to understand their friendship a little more.

Zayne


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