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Review:DracoFerret11 says:
Hello again! This chapter definitely changed things, so let's talk about it:

Plot: WELL. That changed things! Honestly, I was not expecting this. They haven't spoken a word to each other, and this is where the story progresses? Hmm. I just don't know if I buy it. I can definitely see someone in a lot of emotional pain spur-of-the-moment acting like this, but even so, it was just so sudden! I'm glad they slowed things down. That seemed more believable to me. I just can't imagine this happening! Ahh! Suspension of disbelief, come on!

Characterization: I liked Hermione very much in this chapter. I think her anger at Ron and her frustration were very believable. I couldn't believe she really destroyed his portrait, though! I think she'll regret that in the morning. But other than that, I believed her. Her hesitation when they got to the cottage made sense to me. Draco was good here, too, though I can't imagine him suddenly wanting to comfort Hermione by embracing her and kissing her forehead/cheek/lips. I would think he would be more reserved and hesitant. I really liked that he chose to slow down towards the end, though. I think that respect was really nice.

Descriptions: Again, I think you captured the feel of the storm perfectly. The story somehow almost reads like a storm. That makes no sense to see written out, but I'll leave it nonetheless. I think you did a good job describing the scene in the cottage too. It was rushed in a way that made complete sense for the scene. Good job with the writing there!

Emotions: I could still feel Hermione and Draco's pain and heartache in this chapter. I also felt their frustration which was key. That led to the desperation, so I do think it made sense in that aspect. Their desperation to stop feeling pain could definitely drive them into each other's arms. It was just so sudden and so...non-verbal that it jars me out of the story.

Other than my slight discomfort at the quick pace of this story, I did like the chapter! I think writing without dialogue seems VERY difficult and I can't wait to see how you pull off the rest of the story in that same vein. Well done!

--Emily (House Cup 2014 Review)

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