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Review:Pretense Of Perfection says:
Hello there!!

I love a good Sirius/OC, and this was no exception t that. I really like how you portrayed Dorcas, and even though I think Sirius is a jerk, i think you did his character justice, because I can see him lying and perhaps even cheating, especially given all he's been through (not that it's an excuse). I was really curious about the title, and it completely made sense after I read this. I like how you tied it in with the story, almost like a pretty little present. The comparison between their relationship and a shiny apple gone rotten was absolutely brilliant, if I do say so myself. You did an excellent job portraying the uncertainty and confusion being in a toxic relationship, and I think your readers will be able to relate to the story and your MC easily. I do think Dorcas sort of repeated herself a bit toward the end, but everything else was literally perfect. I didn't notice any spelling or grammar errors, and I really love the idea for the plot. I want to know what happens to them so badly, I might just have to come back and read the sequel.

Good job and keep up the aweomse writing!!

---house cup 2014 review---
pretense of perfection, gryffindor

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