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Review:DracoFerret11 says:
Hello! I'm so excited to read the things you've written. :) So, let's go over things:

Plot: This was so interesting! I haven't frequently read about Daphne or Astoria and I've never read about them in this context. It surprises me to know that Astoria would go against her family. I sort of like that I can't really tell WHICH side she's on, though. I'm leaning towards saying that Astoria is going against the Death Eaters, but the story never explicitly says one way or the other.

Characterization: I liked how you painted Astoria's character. She seems very realistic, and I would be happy to have her end up with Draco. :) She was strong-willed which was interesting to see in a sixteen-year-old. Well done.

Descriptions: I didn't get many details about how anything looked, sounded, felt, smelled, etc. I could kind of imagine her going down to the dungeons, but I wasn't really even sure why she did that. More information might help just a bit.

Emotions: I could feel the confusion before Astoria made her choice to stay, and then her determination came across very well. I liked that she stood her ground. I wonder, though, if she was ever scared or worried. In her situation, I think I would be.

Interactions: I loved the argument between the sisters. I had never thought of them to be particularly different, so this was an interesting take. I also liked that Daphne seemed so much colder than Astoria. That juxtaposition was really nice.

Overall, great job. I liked the story a lot and will be reading more of yours soon! 'Claws for the Cup!

--Emily (House Cup 2014 Review)

Author's Response: I'm really glad that you liked Astoria! I think that I have a bit of a more sympathetic take on Draco than a lot of people do - he was really unpleasant throughout their time at Hogwarts, there's no doubt about that, but I do tend to think that he changed a lot post-Hogwarts/war. Consequently, I think that I have a more positive take on Astoria herself than some might. (You guessed right - she is going against the Death Eaters, though I left it vague intentionally.)

I can see what you mean about the description, though - it is a little sparse, looking back, and I can see how the one-shot would be improved by a little more specificity. I'll definitely take a look at it to see about improving that.

Thank you so much for the review! :) I'm glad you liked this!


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