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Review:DracoFerret11 says:
Hello again! Let's go over things:

Plot: This was so lovely. I think you're pulling off the no-dialogue-thing, but it IS a bit different. I sort of wish I could see how they would talk to each other, but it's very powerful that they aren't saying anything. Hermione comforting Draco with her hand on his back was so moving. I could see grieving people acting that way, so it isn't out of character for me at all. And the burning of the books was so symbolic and perfect. Great job.

Characterization: Hermione was wonderful here. I love that she treats Draco with respect and caring, despite their history. I do wonder why he thought she would be cruel to him -- his son was set to marry her daughter, after all. You would think they would have moved past any animosity. You wrote for Draco well too, though. I really like the fact that he's so broken that he can't even be cold towards her. That's so realistic.

Descriptions: Your details about the tea and the books and the rain are so amazing. I can see this whole scene happening, and it's beautiful. You did a great job.

Emotions: This sort of ties into "descriptions" in this chapter. Their emotions come out in very physical, real ways. I could feel Draco's pain and sorrow, and Hermione's matching emotions. The empathy really just oozes from this story.

Interactions: As I mentioned before, Hermione comforting Draco was so sweet. That gesture was so humane and decent. She treats him with such love after his tragedy, and I really admire the way you've portrayed that.

Overall, great job. I'll read more soon! Good luck to Slytherin in the House Cup!

--Emily (House Cup 2014 Review)

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